neil patrick harris. Jackass
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1678
 | May 21st, 2006 at 03:18pm And So the City Burns
You’re mind is a cruel city waiting for that one match.
Smoke blocks it up and it slowly loses its function.
Only one more you say, but you still continue to pollute.
The day it dies, you wonder what you did to your kin.
Let your city burn. Let the ashes fall in the streets.
Now it’s nothing but ruins. And you’re still ignorant.
You walk through the empty, charred streets alone.
You look up as the dirty debris slowly descends.
And yet you still ignore what was once true.
You murder yourself over why they altogether left you.
The only way to cure yourself is to turn to the razor.
And you still know it’s wrong, but it can’t be undone.
Locate a filthy mirror and stare into it violently.
Who do you see? Is it still you? How have you changed?
But you still ignore it. Shatter the mirror of your life.
You’re left undefined and you’re life is absently mangled. |
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay] Geek
![Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]](/data/board-avatars/empty.gif) Age: - Gender: - Posts: 225 | May 21st, 2006 at 03:21pm Let your city burn. Let the ashes fall in the streets.
Now it’s nothing but ruins. And you’re still ignorant.
You walk through the empty, charred streets alone.
You look up as the dirty debris slowly descends
loved that bit |
neil patrick harris. Jackass
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1678
 | May 21st, 2006 at 03:23pm Thanks. =] |
neil patrick harris. Jackass
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1678
 | May 21st, 2006 at 03:40pm I feel like I should explain what this is about..even though it's painfully obvious.
It's about how drugs can completely ruin your life and how they do nothing good except kills you. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
| May 21st, 2006 at 08:25pm Hmm. It wasn't bad at all, but there was just something that I didn't quite like about it. I wish I could place it. =/ Anyway, it was pretty good for what it was. |
It Had to Be You. King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3593 | May 21st, 2006 at 08:27pm Locate a filthy mirror and stare into it violently.
Who do you see? Is it still you? How have you changed?
But you still ignore it. Shatter the mirror of your life.
You’re left undefined and you’re life is absently mangled.
Here's your Number One Fan!!1
Lol. Great job hun!  |
neil patrick harris. Jackass
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1678
 | May 21st, 2006 at 11:51pm [Flawless Error] - Yeah, something just didn't seem right in it..but thanks.
It Had to Be You. - Yay! Another fan, haha. Thanks. |
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451
| May 22nd, 2006 at 01:01pm The only way to cure yourself is to turn to the razor.
And you still know it’s wrong, but it can’t be undone.
^That’s what’s wrong. Too painfully cliché.
I really like the rest though. Great structure and choice of words. |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | May 22nd, 2006 at 01:01pm I like that.
A lot. |
neil patrick harris. Jackass
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1678
 | May 25th, 2006 at 07:33pm Hmm. Thanks guys. |