Meski
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 | May 27th, 2006 at 06:26am What is love if i dont live it?
What is death if you dont die?
What is life if youre fucked up?
All you have to do for me is die
Ill grab anything
Or ill convince you into commiting suicide
Do you really think i feel good
When you treat me like a dog
Or how bout when you depress me
Now thats a bad life
Not what you think,
Your parents love you
And everyone loves
I only have you since I was 15
I loved you but now youre a total bitch
All you have to do for me is die
When there arent any chances of living
In a place called "my home"
Fuck everyone and fuck you
Im an orphan since 12
You treated me nice
But now I want you dead.
The sad story of a friend I hope you like it! |
clark
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Posts: 79047 | May 27th, 2006 at 06:38am I like it.  |
Dead End Girl
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Posts: 10219 | May 27th, 2006 at 12:02pm I liked it a lot <3.
It had good flow and was well said. |
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King For A Couple Of Days
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 | May 27th, 2006 at 12:09pm It’s very sad that that’s how you feel. I think I understand though. 
 It flows really well. It feels sort of fast and angry and not like some random words scribbled down.
 It lacks full stops. It’s easier to understand and to read if you use punctuation.
Often it doesn’t work when you put in numbers like “12”. Write “twelve” instead.
Also do separate the “don” from the “t” in “don’t” and so on.
Good job and keep writing.  |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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| May 27th, 2006 at 12:20pm I didn't really like it all that much. =/ It didn't seem very poetic to me at all. |
Meski
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| May 27th, 2006 at 03:52pm U liked it? thanks u guys, i'll keep that in mind whats in a name?! |
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King For A Couple Of Days
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| May 27th, 2006 at 04:00pm Good. ^_^ And you can call me Rose, all my friends do. |
Miley Cyrus
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| May 27th, 2006 at 04:02pm [Flawless Error]:I didn't really like it all that much. =/ It didn't seem very poetic to me at all.
I was thinking something like that.
I think it would be a lot better as lyrics. |
Meski
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| May 27th, 2006 at 04:22pm What's in a name?:Good. ^_^ And you can call me Rose, all my friends do. OK Rose! |
Meski
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| May 28th, 2006 at 06:34am sheepless and redundant:[Flawless Error]:I didn't really like it all that much. =/ It didn't seem very poetic to me at all.
I was thinking something like that.
I think it would be a lot better as lyrics.
I was thinkin the same thing before writing it cause i wanted to make it like lirics!! |
