Paranoia
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| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451  | I found this =O It's kind old but I thought "hey, why not post it". I think it's not been posted before because I thought it was bad.  Paranoia Suddenly words turn to daggers That glimmer in the light Of paranoia. They leach out Stabbing Attacking Ripping holes in an already confused mind. Insecurity leaks and spill upon The myriad of figures dancing In a forever mocking way. Lurking hidden messages Awaits behind every sentence To strike upon lacking trust. Fear of rejection mixes with anger of being afraid. The emotions tumble in a turmoil that’s roaring On the inside of a thick skull filled with jagged memories, Which cut through rationality with razor-sharp blades Of a morbid past that creates the insane future reactions. Isolation on an island created out of frustration, Desolated in a raging sea with waves of mistrust While trying to hide from the haunting inescapable facts. Everywhere a new threat, every day means distrust And every stranger can turn out as a demonic enemy. |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | It's good. Love the ending, my dear soulmate.  |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Thank you, my brilliant soulmate.  |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | Awesomeness  It's interesting... I don't how to describe what I mean. But good interesting... |
| Meski Addict Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856  | |
| Kyna Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 435 | |
| newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495 | I like doing reviews, and frankly, you completely deserve one. "Suddenly words turn to daggers That glimmers in the light Of paranoia." ^A small grammar mistake  "Insecurity leaks and spill upon The myriad of figures dancing In a forever mocking way." ^Such a beautiful way to put it. When you started making the lines longer, I really thought that it would mess up the entire flow, but yet again you proved me wrong. Overall, this poem has a pretty strong meaning behind it. 80/100 |
| B.J Falling In Love With The Board Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 8105 | |
| rollerpig GSBitch  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | First of all: A big thank you to everyone and some candy *hands out candy* Ella: Thank you for the correction. I try to have a beautiful way with words. Sometimes I succeed. Heh, you should know that I’m terrific at making my poems flow nicely. *Bows* |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | |
| ladyramone Post Whore Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 21701 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | ladyramone: Don’t call it pretty good. That’s just precisely above ok. It’s a lot better than that.  Also to me pretty good means it could have been a lot better and that constructive criticism is needed. Yes, I’m overreacting. I’m very picky when it comes to comments on my poem since I take them rather seriously. =P |
| gdaywolfbane Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 74 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Thank you! |
| snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | That was so great, I loved that! |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | *bows* I’m glad to hear. Um, except I didn’t hear it, I saw it because you wrote it eh... well, it’s just a figure of speech. [/rant] |
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