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Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844
 | May 28th, 2006 at 08:42pm For every waking moment,
In the never-ending light,
I slowly grow to realize,
Love is fading from my sight.
For every fallen tear,
And every spoken lie,
I’ve torn apart her heart,
And made her want to cry.
I thought she really loved me,
So I handed her my heart.
Mistakes are made, and that was one,
So now I’m torn apart.
                   ~
Not the best.. HONESTLY.... I was just in Poetry mode.. O_o |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
| May 28th, 2006 at 09:07pm I LOVELOVE the first stanza. As for the whole thing, it flowed really well and while it became a bit predictable, it was still really good. In conclusion:  |
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451
| May 29th, 2006 at 05:08am [Flawless Error]:I LOVELOVE the first stanza. As for the whole thing, it flowed really well and while it became a bit predictable, it was still really good. In conclusion: 
*nods* yup. The second stanza is a bit cliché and average though as is the last. But written in a good way, if you know what I mean. |
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | May 29th, 2006 at 05:48am I really loved it  It didn't sound at all forced, because it had a good beat it.
Great job! |
clark GSBitch
 Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 79047 | May 29th, 2006 at 08:12am Well done.  |
rollerpig GSBitch
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283 | May 29th, 2006 at 10:39am I like it! :] |
Meski Addict
 Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856
 | May 29th, 2006 at 10:42am You made a very good poem! |
Garrett Hanlund This Board Is My Home
 Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 30801
 | May 29th, 2006 at 12:24pm It was good. |
love. King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 2844 | May 29th, 2006 at 06:48pm i like it. Its really good  |
Inari King For A Couple Of Days
 Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538 | May 30th, 2006 at 07:28am That's actually pretty cool.
I like it. |
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495
| May 30th, 2006 at 09:01am I like the first stanza. |