Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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Posts: 225 | June 3rd, 2006 at 08:05am Am I beautiful,
With tears on my cheeks?
Am I pretty,
With bruises across my face?
Is this why you,
Do the things you do,
Make me hear,
The words you say.
You tell me i've done wrong,
As I smell the drink on your breath,
Then I take the final step,
Step towards my death,
Leave me lying here,
Alone in my blood,
Drenched in fear,
Entranced by the darkness,
Dissolving my soul |
11th Street Kid
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Posts: 3645 | June 3rd, 2006 at 10:54am Hmm.. it was okay. |
rollerpig
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Posts: 62283 | June 3rd, 2006 at 11:04am I liked the beginning .. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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 | June 3rd, 2006 at 11:12am It was okay, wasn't terribly too original for the subject you chose, though. I would say try to avoid these type of subjects if you can. |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
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Posts: 4161 | June 3rd, 2006 at 12:39pm It was okay. Just okay. |
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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Posts: 225 | June 4th, 2006 at 06:59am Thanks for the comments. I love constructive critism  |
