rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 2nd, 2006 at 02:02am not a song yet
maybe just a poem
So I’m worthless?
Well that makes you the father of a worthless man
I don’t deserve this?
You will never ever seem to understand
Am I broken?
I should hang my head in shame
Am I fallen?
And I’m the only one to blame |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | June 3rd, 2006 at 04:05am u know u wanna comment it c'mon |
Vanity
King For A Couple Of Days
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Posts: 4708 | June 3rd, 2006 at 05:19am Hmm. So-so. If it was a bit longer it'd be better. Still pretty good though. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
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Posts: 42495
 | June 3rd, 2006 at 05:24am The first lines were long, and in my opinion it worked well, but when you shortened them it kind of ruined the flow.
Nothing special, but it was okay. |
rollerpig
GSBitch
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Gender: Female
Posts: 62283 | June 3rd, 2006 at 05:45am I don't like it. :/ sry |
Matty.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Male
Posts: 3945 | June 3rd, 2006 at 05:57am that would sound so cool with some rock music to it |
billiejoeblowjob
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
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Posts: 42 | June 4th, 2006 at 01:39am bloody brilliant. (although i accidently thought your siggy was part of the poem adn got all confused.) ^^U i really liked the repetition. do you really mean for it to be a song? |
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
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Posts: 225 | June 4th, 2006 at 07:07am its totally awesome! yet short. i really liked it. |
