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Spirit Of '97 Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 12	June 2nd, 2006 at 08:25pm runnin' to class, without my hall pass. i'm stuck in this school, with lots of gay fools. this school is torture and should be put a blaze. i haven't learned anything anyways. what i need is an escape, maybe to a nearby lake. anything to save me from this place. i went out to skate, and tripped on a rake. nothing to grind, i'm losing my mind. this road is torture and should be put a blaze. i haven't landed anything anyways. what i need is an escape, maybe ishould bake a cake, anything to save my from this place. i wanted to drum, but i broke my thumb. i hate my guitar, it got dropped at a bar. this stage is torture and should be put a blaze. i haven't played anything anyways. what i need is an escape, maybe through a freezing lake, anything to save my from this place. nothing in my life is going right, and today i lost another fight. what i need is a way out, before i get on my knees and pout. please save me, i'm going crazy, i've got voice in my head. i'm out of luck, so i guess i'm stuck, til someone comes and saves me.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	June 2nd, 2006 at 08:38pm Your "poem" annoyed the crap out of me from the very first stanza. I bet you can figure out why.
wanderlust Addict Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 10418	June 2nd, 2006 at 08:40pm yeah, sorry, but i agree with hardcore panda. the rhyming scheme is incredibly cheesy.
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 3rd, 2006 at 05:30am That might just be the biggest load of crap I have ever read.
rollerpig GSBitch Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283	June 3rd, 2006 at 05:35am I agree with the people above .. It was really .. Ugh
Matty. King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Male Posts: 3945	June 3rd, 2006 at 05:58am pretty simple, good length though
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	June 3rd, 2006 at 06:03am Ella: That might just be the biggest load of crap I have ever read. chooses not to elaborate Yeah.
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay] Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 225	June 3rd, 2006 at 07:43am well...i agree with all of the above...
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	June 3rd, 2006 at 11:53am "with lots of gay fools" I quit reading right there
ancient Had A Life Before GSB Age: 31 Gender: Female Posts: 29697	June 3rd, 2006 at 12:10pm This poem sucked some serious dick. Using gay was not the right thing to do, and the rhyming was forced. It didn't flow well and it wasn't creative.
Dehren McGhengland Rotting On Here Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 49206	June 3rd, 2006 at 03:54pm I_worship_tre_Cool: "with lots of gay fools" I quit reading right there Same. =\|
[Your Best Mistake] Idiot Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 551	June 3rd, 2006 at 04:26pm That was...........nicht gut.
davey jones. Falling In Love With The Board Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 7018	June 3rd, 2006 at 04:28pm =P I don't know what else to say. Apparently it's already been said.
Sherlock Holmes Addict Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 10375	June 3rd, 2006 at 04:33pm Jenni no like poem....
Ella Speed Geek Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 485	June 3rd, 2006 at 04:57pm grate, was like u were talking bout me
Ghostie. Geek Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 495	June 4th, 2006 at 08:54pm It's pretty true, but compleatly forced. Let it flow next time you try to write. The talent's apparent, and it's trying to escapte. Let it. By the way, never use 'gay' as an insult.
Eliana Rampage Jackass Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1958	June 4th, 2006 at 09:03pm ... I agree with every other comment here, unless you used this as a joke to emphazise the atmosphere you were giving the poem, which I highly doubt you were. I hate gay as a derogatory, don't do it.

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