The Doctor
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
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  | June 10th, 2006 at 06:41pm I lay on my bed and I mutter and pretend to pray
And yet I don't believe a word
My belief is my release, the more I pretend
The easier it becomes.
Thoughts and memories twirl before my eyes
Like fluttering ribbons in the warm evening air
Some old and tattered and some new
And cast a shimmering light across my room
I close my eyes and I hear your voice
Even though I can't listen to what you say
It's impossible and yet probable
I can hear you, you're millions of miles away
In the humid air of today, I smothered myself
In cold anxiety of your demise
This vexing vixen, barely awake
And barely asleep
Just drifting in subconsiousness
And the damp summer breeze. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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| June 10th, 2006 at 07:12pm Lovely use of assonance throughout the whole poem. It was great. 
Like fluttering ribbons in the warm evening air
Some old and tattered and some new
And cast a shimmering light across my room
^Fwee. Those lines sounded awesome.  |
The Doctor
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| June 10th, 2006 at 07:15pm Hardcore Panda!!1:Lovely use of assonance throughout the whole poem. It was great.
Like fluttering ribbons in the warm evening air
Some old and tattered and some new
And cast a shimmering light across my room
^Fwee. Those lines sounded awesome.
what does assonance mean?  |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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| June 10th, 2006 at 07:17pm It's when you use the same vowel sound; it gives a similar effect to rhyming. Ex:
Asleep has the same "e" sound as breeze.
...So I'm guessing it was unintentional, then?  It sounded good either way. |
The Doctor
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| June 10th, 2006 at 07:18pm Hardcore Panda!!1:It's when you use the same vowel sound; it gives a similar effect to rhyming. Ex:
Asleep has the same "e" sound as breeze.
...So I'm guessing it was unintentional, then? It sounded good either way. Haha , well thank you anyway and you learn a new thing everyday |
newagecarny
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| June 10th, 2006 at 07:30pm I love that. The title is also interesting. |
