Your Last Kiss

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tAcOs!-Jay
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
tAcOs!-Jay
Age: 34
Gender: Male
Posts: 83
June 12th, 2006 at 02:05pm
You died in my arms
A slow and painful death
A part in life I freely accept
And now you're gone
Leaving me to cry
Your lips are cold
As i give you a last kiss good-bye
Meski
Addict
Meski
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 14856

Blog
June 12th, 2006 at 02:11pm
you could've done it a bit longer but I guess it's OK
Toxic Teeth
Idiot
Toxic Teeth
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 645

Blog
June 12th, 2006 at 02:43pm
its a good start, but i would have added more Wink
Kurtni
Admin
Kurtni
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 34289

Mibba Blog
June 12th, 2006 at 03:12pm
Length is never a factor in poetry, however, quality is. This sounds like everyother poem, it doesnt stand out.
Ms. Murder
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Ms. Murder
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 38
June 12th, 2006 at 06:59pm
its ok, but quite short and ya
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