Pick Out The Sore Thumb In This Year's Beauty Pageant

Perfection never fitted over this ventriloquist's dummy's mind.
Expectation blurred with lipstick smears on mini-skirts.
Is this the kind of angel you thought you'd raised from the gravel?
The mud-lines still frame my gown with deception and you're admiring
the smile that streaks my face into an optimist's fabrications,
creating caverns in the dimpled cheeks of a devil in poet's clothing.

Just another straight A fuck-up with fastidious tendencies.
It doesn't make sense to minds jailed in cardboard restrictions
but neither does the media-glazed society dominated by plastic screens.
Interrogation methods set a telescope to the soul within when it's just
paradoxical shards of glass reflecting back lies to sealed minds.
Confused much? That's just part of the plan, my dear, analytical ego.
Do I hurl the dart through your expectations of my future or do my
pyromaniac mood-swings form pyres from your crystallised hopes?

Ragdoll tendencies and shattered babydoll attidues fit so much better.
Anorexic lifestyles are too predictable in a casted society.
I'll play the role of the low-life to rejection and smile in broad
strokes at your subjugated lifestyle. Tune life to the script.
I'll ad-lib my way through existence to tangle the wires.
Am I just being complicated or elaborately original?
I'll admit in whispered truths that I can't decide.
But those two traits are often mistaken as clones of definition,
the verdict depending on the mind of the judge of suburban strife.

So I'll lay my lawless life upon the counter.
But it's never been up to you to decide protean worth.

O__________o That is amazing. I'd say it was the best poem I've ever read on here. Well done. It's beautiful.

it reminded me of all the other poems you write, but

"Just another straight A fuck-up with fastidious tendencies. "

That line looked extremely out of place with the vocabulary you used in the rest of the poem and killed the mood it was setting.

Am I just being complicated or elaborately original?
I'll admit in whispered truths that I can't decide.
But those two traits are often mistaken as clones of definition,
the verdict depending on the mind of the judge of suburban strife

That set of lines was my favorite part.

Love it.

But.. you know that.




Confused much? That's just part of the plan, my dear, analytical ego.

And that line.. I'll always remember that one.

Thank you guys.

Lovelyyyy.

I_worship_tre_Cool:

it reminded me of all the other poems you write, but

"Just another straight A fuck-up with fastidious tendencies. "

That line looked extremely out of place with the vocabulary you used in the rest of the poem and killed the mood it was setting.

Am I just being complicated or elaborately original?
I'll admit in whispered truths that I can't decide.
But those two traits are often mistaken as clones of definition,
the verdict depending on the mind of the judge of suburban strife

That set of lines was my favorite part.

Well it should remind you of Keighley's other poems because Keighley wrote it. Poets, just like authors and musicians have their own writing patterns and styles so you can give over about that, and I know a lot of people have been giving Keighley shit about her using complex words, which I'll admit I don't understand, but she isn't a 'dictionary poet' as people have dubbed her. She's taking A level english language and literature so why shouldn't she have a large vocabulary. Poetry, like music and other arts, is a written manifestation of a personal emtion or feeling so if she needs to use a certain word to capture this, then who the fuck are you to tell her she can't use that word.

I feel so much better after writing that

hair_chops:

I_worship_tre_Cool:

it reminded me of all the other poems you write, but

"Just another straight A fuck-up with fastidious tendencies. "

That line looked extremely out of place with the vocabulary you used in the rest of the poem and killed the mood it was setting.

Am I just being complicated or elaborately original?
I'll admit in whispered truths that I can't decide.
But those two traits are often mistaken as clones of definition,
the verdict depending on the mind of the judge of suburban strife

That set of lines was my favorite part.

Well it should remind you of Keighley's other poems because Keighley wrote it. Poets, just like authors and musicians have their own writing patterns and styles so you can give over about that, and I know a lot of people have been giving Keighley shit about her using complex words, which I'll admit I don't understand, but she isn't a 'dictionary poet' as people have dubbed her. She's taking A level english language and literature so why shouldn't she have a large vocabulary. Poetry, like music and other arts, is a written manifestation of a personal emtion or feeling so if she needs to use a certain word to capture this, then who the fuck are you to tell her she can't use that word.

I feel so much better after writing that

Individual styles are great, the only thing is it isnt individual, there are a million different poets who write just like that. I never said you can't use elaboratre words, what I did say, however, is that it gets majorly over done in an attempt to make the poem seem "beautiful" when really, no one ends up understadning it, so they all agree in unison and say it's great. I didnt even say that about this poem, because this poem actually made sense, what I said was that line looked very out of place in the surrounding context. I never told her she couldnt use it now did I? I said I didnt like it, which I have every right to do.

No One used the poetry forum for what it is for, which is probably why it's being eliminated. All the comments lie "thats so beautiful" are pointless and not needed. If you are not goint to critque a Poem, and point out its flaws and it's better points, you shouldnt comment. Thats what this whole forum turned into, people picking out the popular poets and always assume that to be the way to write, you forget their is a whole poetic world outside GSB. No two poets should write completely alike.

So, I suggest you calm down, watch your language, and accept the fact that I use this forum the way it was intended. You guys are not going to have it much longer, so maybe you should all start using it properly. Actually give helpful criticsm, don't act like a poem is perfect, because there is no such thing. I never, ever said Inari is a bad poet, I think she has an amazing talent and I love reading her work, not her dictionaries work.

Gosh, just stop that discussion.

Honestly, we all understand Inari's poems,
"big" words or not.
It's her style and we love her for it.
Point.

I_worship_tre_Cool:

hair_chops:

I_worship_tre_Cool:

it reminded me of all the other poems you write, but

"Just another straight A fuck-up with fastidious tendencies. "

That line looked extremely out of place with the vocabulary you used in the rest of the poem and killed the mood it was setting.

Am I just being complicated or elaborately original?
I'll admit in whispered truths that I can't decide.
But those two traits are often mistaken as clones of definition,
the verdict depending on the mind of the judge of suburban strife

That set of lines was my favorite part.

Well it should remind you of Keighley's other poems because Keighley wrote it. Poets, just like authors and musicians have their own writing patterns and styles so you can give over about that, and I know a lot of people have been giving Keighley shit about her using complex words, which I'll admit I don't understand, but she isn't a 'dictionary poet' as people have dubbed her. She's taking A level english language and literature so why shouldn't she have a large vocabulary. Poetry, like music and other arts, is a written manifestation of a personal emtion or feeling so if she needs to use a certain word to capture this, then who the fuck are you to tell her she can't use that word.

I feel so much better after writing that

Individual styles are great, the only thing is it isnt individual, there are a million different poets who write just like that. I never said you can't use elaboratre words, what I did say, however, is that it gets majorly over done in an attempt to make the poem seem "beautiful" when really, no one ends up understadning it, so they all agree in unison and say it's great. I didnt even say that about this poem, because this poem actually made sense, what I said was that line looked very out of place in the surrounding context. I never told her she couldnt use it now did I? I said I didnt like it, which I have every right to do.

No One used the poetry forum for what it is for, which is probably why it's being eliminated. All the comments lie "thats so beautiful" are pointless and not needed. If you are not goint to critque a Poem, and point out its flaws and it's better points, you shouldnt comment. Thats what this whole forum turned into, people picking out the popular poets and always assume that to be the way to write, you forget their is a whole poetic world outside GSB. No two poets should write completely alike.

So, I suggest you calm down, watch your language, and accept the fact that I use this forum the way it was intended. You guys are not going to have it much longer, so maybe you should all start using it properly. Actually give helpful criticsm, don't act like a poem is perfect, because there is no such thing. I never, ever said Inari is a bad poet, I think she has an amazing talent and I love reading her work, not her dictionaries work.

You say that you don't mind using elaborate words, so then why do you critisise those who do? Yes many poets do write like that, but that doesn't mean she can't do it, that's jsut how she writes.

Fine make a criticism, but make sure your criticism makes sense. that line

"Just another straight A fuck-up with fastidious tendencies. "

is meant to be out of place. Also, just because you didn't like this poem, or something about it, doesn't mean other people don't, so you can't say that people are only saying they like it becasue they don't understand because you don't know that, you're not inside their heads so how do you know whether they like it or not?

You don't know Keighley or how she writes so how can you say that she uses a dictionary to write? Keighley always uses these words, not just in her poems, but when we're talking face to face or if she's writing for college work.

If you hate these what you call dictionary poems. then don't read them. If you don't like them fair enough, but don't make assumptions about the poet and her writing, you may and will offend without wanting to. I can't imagine you wanting to hurt Keighley, but if someone told me that my work was a dictionary poem I would be greatly hurt, especially if I was as dedicated to my work as Keighley is

This is a poetry forum, if she didnt want me to state my opinion on her poems, she wouldnt have posted it, Thats what this forum is for. Let me say what I have already said, once again. I don't mind elaborate words, what kills poems is overdone elaborate words. And you're right I'm not inside their heads, but until they actaully critque the poem and say why they like it, I can assume they don't understand alot of it. You're taking the term dictionary poet way to literal. You don't actually have to use a dictionary to be a dictionary poet, I know all the words she uses too, as Im sure most people here do, being a dictionary poet means you overuse the words and crowd your poem with them. I don't have to know her to read her poetry.

I_worship_tre_Cool:

This is a poetry forum, if she didnt want me to state my opinion on her poems, she wouldnt have posted it, Thats what this forum is for. Let me say what I have already said, once again. I don't mind elaborate words, what kills poems is overdone elaborate words. And you're right I'm not inside their heads, but until they actaully critque the poem and say why they like it, I can assume they don't understand alot of it. You're taking the term dictionary poet way to literal. You don't actually have to use a dictionary to be a dictionary poet, I know all the words she uses too, as Im sure most people here do, being a dictionary poet means you overuse the words and crowd your poem with them. I don't have to know her to read her poetry.

I can't be bothered with you, but let me just say this. Let her write how she wants, and let people use the poetry forum for what they want. Some people may not want to critque the poem or at least not write about it. Some people may like a lot of vocabulary in their poetry.

If you read her poetry, then you know the real Keighley.

SHE WAS INSPIRED BY -ME-....

=DDDDD

*feels special*

Anti-Prose <3s you.

hair_chops:

I_worship_tre_Cool:

This is a poetry forum, if she didnt want me to state my opinion on her poems, she wouldnt have posted it, Thats what this forum is for. Let me say what I have already said, once again. I don't mind elaborate words, what kills poems is overdone elaborate words. And you're right I'm not inside their heads, but until they actaully critque the poem and say why they like it, I can assume they don't understand alot of it. You're taking the term dictionary poet way to literal. You don't actually have to use a dictionary to be a dictionary poet, I know all the words she uses too, as Im sure most people here do, being a dictionary poet means you overuse the words and crowd your poem with them. I don't have to know her to read her poetry.

I can't be bothered with you, but let me just say this. Let her write how she wants, and let people use the poetry forum for what they want. Some people may not want to critque the poem or at least not write about it. Some people may like a lot of vocabulary in their poetry.

If you read her poetry, then you know the real Keighley.

Well, that is not what the forum is for, that would be like someone going in the Green Day forum and saying, "Oh, I don't want to use it as a greem Day forum, I want to use it differently.". Any post that is "thats so pretty" isnt needed. We all know poems are pretty. The purpose of this forum was to share ideas and discuss poetry written by you guys, but there's no discussion. I am entitles to my opinion, and this forum is for the purpose of stating it. Do not say anything else that is off topic spam, if it doesnt relate to her poem keep it to yourself and don't be hateful.

Eliana Rampage:

SHE WAS INSPIRED BY -ME-....

=DDDDD

*feels special*

Anti-Prose <3s you.

Lol!!!
And your anti-prose fan <3s you!

I love it

I just love the way you write so much, I just can't get tired of reading your work...

I think you've used this topic a few times before, but it doesn't mean it's not beautiful.