DaveyHavok666
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Posts: 250 | June 13th, 2006 at 10:08pm WHo is that girl who sits in that class,
minding her own buissness, but they all laugh.
She is the one that stands out from the crowd,
she is a loner and has nothing to feel proud.
Cuts covering her arms, shes still wallowing in her past,
she feels she needs to lose her life and fast.
She speaks harsh words and Has a nasty glare,
could make your heart stop in one single stare.
She has suffered a broken heart and a broken home,
into the darkness, she'll forever roam. |
Kurtni
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  | June 13th, 2006 at 10:14pm I think it would have been better with a different rhyme scheme.
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That Scheme is really hard to do and not seem amaturish. I hope you keep writting, maybe try an odd Scheme next time, maybe a
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Thats a really neat scheme if you match your syllables right.  |
