Cloth of Joseph's Coat

Mmkay my little poetic cherubs. I have a task. You need to tell me if there's anything you don't like or it's utter word vomit. I'm doing poetry for my Higher.

I philosophized my dreams
into a magnificent dress.
Embroidered with short daydreams of times past
and my secret , even unknown to myself
Hopes woven into the fabric.
Train tracks of tiny lace snippets
add again to the unique monotony of the sleeves.
Joyous moments make my gown shine,
like the moon on the most lupine night
when it is full.
The nightmares ended up making
a string of star sapphires.
These bewitched gems swirl in anger
and are my constant reminder
of my mortality.
As I step outside into the brisk
summery rain and into the street,
I realise
I laid myself bare.

i love it!!

I really like that. It's unique and the words you used to describe it really enhanced the poem. I don't think I would change anything.

Really really tiny things--
-I think it would improve the flow if (no really, this is trivial) you didn't capitalize every line.
-Scarlet opals. Never heard of them. They sound frighteningly lovely, but I just can't picture that.
-The line "Of the harsh reality." It's a bit cliche, which is totally alright because I really don't think you need it at all, the previous line would stand without it.

Kitti:

Really really tiny things--
-I think it would improve the flow if (no really, this is trivial) you didn't capitalize every line.
-Scarlet opals. Never heard of them. They sound frighteningly lovely, but I just can't picture that.
-The line "Of the harsh reality." It's a bit cliche, which is totally alright because I really don't think you need it at all, the previous line would stand without it.

Thank you. I shall make some amendments but I just wanted a different item to the cliched black pearls with was my original. I shall alter