Brendon Urie..
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2394
 | June 15th, 2006 at 01:36am i've forgotten who i am
what i was
who i could have been
where i needed to turn
and the street signs i have missed
the bridge that burned after my crossing
the lake that dried after i swam it
the tears that grew the hedge maze
i am forever stuck in
the lipstick smears and torn lace
the wet eyelashes and bleeding fingertips
the broken teeth and torn out nails
the hacked off hair and nails in my hands
old tears covered by the new
day old newspapers of war
yesterday's walmart flyer under my coffee mug
a paperback novel with a torn cover
a pen without ink trying to sign a check
a broken ATM card to an empty account
a tube of old lipstick in a purse without a strap
shoes without shoelaces next to a year old Cosmo
chasing vodka with a vodka chaser
gin and water, hold the latter
give me a god damn cigarette without the filter
let me hold the lighter under my finger
watch my flesh burn away
laugh at scars that will never fade
coffee black and tylenol
blankets up over my head
i'll curse the sun but it can't hear
it never could, never will
and will just ignore if it can
can you blame it?
can you blame the street signs for hiding?
the gin for pouring itself?
the fire for laughing?
the scars that won't leave the wrists they call home?
day old newspapers with stories of war
next to any empty coffee mug |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| June 15th, 2006 at 05:53am That's pretty good. For a moment there I thought it would just be the same depressing meaningless poetry a usual but you seemed to capture it all well.
the wet eyelashes and bleeding fingertips
In some other occasion that would have sounded cliché but here it actually doesn't.
coffee black and tylenol
blankets up over my head
i'll curse the sun but it can't hear
it never could, never will
^Great.
can you blame it?
can you blame the street signs for hiding?
the gin for pouring itself?
the fire for laughing?
the scars that won't leave the wrists they call home?
You beg to differ, you're somewhat different although you could use some more metaphores.
Keep it up, you're getting better and better  |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | June 15th, 2006 at 05:55am Wow.
I absolutely loved that.
Wow. |
