newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495
June 15th, 2006 at 08:58am
Ella brings you an infant in an attempt to beat writers block. Nothing's helping. I rarely ever post here ;_;
Hommes ridicules
No man can bare the shame of betrayal,
The marble tears and the shiny starlight.
No man can carry the weight on his shoulders.
No modern superman or a gallant knight.
Some men believe in happiness of love,
And know that without it they won't be complete.
Some men never daydream further than
Obscure dirt on their Monday's bed sheet.
Men often like talking in obsceneties
About their infected and endangered mind.
Men often ignore the astonishing fact
They're almost half of all mankind.
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Awwwh. ;__; Poor Ella *huggles* That was excellent, I loved the subject of the whole poem -and- the rhyming scheme, very unique and interesting, you're a GREAT poet, overcome that writers block, dearest.
tAcOs!-Jay Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 34 Gender: Male Posts: 83
June 15th, 2006 at 10:56am
i didn't like the story line all that much........
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538
June 15th, 2006 at 11:21am
I loved that.
It was seriously awesome.
I loved: Some men never daydream further than
Obscure dirt on their Monday's bed sheet.
You used and Overused rhyme scheme and made it good again. Alot of people couldnt have pulled off something like that without sound cheesy, but you did it. Good Job!
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
June 15th, 2006 at 12:46pm
I love that. Clever little twisty thing at the end. If you know what I mean, because I'm not sure I do. XD
