It's Not Always The Luck And The Look
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| love. King For A Couple Of Days  Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 2844 | i love it.  |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451  | Very good. Me likey. |
| newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495 | |
| snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | Thank you, guys!  |
| snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | Ella: You're welcome, darling. I knew you'd know whom it is about, and since we both think alike when it comes to him, I decided to dedicate it to you. I'm so glad you like it.  |
| newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495 | snowcherry: I will cherish it forever and ever. |
| Kurtni Admin  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289  |  Why am I just now finding this poem?Mediocrity always judged him viciously Reality starring as it's blatant companion Against whatever he'd want to choose Whatever he'd want was not enough Maybe would have been if they'd given it to him But happiness is a journey Those lines flowed well, connected and had a meaning that was an amazingly awesome way to start a poem. That stanza holds true for real life. And he traveled far Clever but not wise enough He's fallen in love with a feeling Desires to reach the constant highs But what he's gaining are burning lows Against worn out night-life skin Dragging beaten shoes Is this more of a prose? It almost seems like a story now, it may not be very long, but I think it could be considered prose. I likeing everything in there, your language is colorful. One thing you could have done was use imagry to show just where he's "dragging beaten shoes", maybe describe the setting more. Passionate hearts crave more than affection I really like that line, it's begining to summarize letting you know the poem is coming to an end. More than inspiration in stages of blue I dont understand the stages of Blue metaphor, can you explain it to me? And fragile souls need special comfort Traveling the lands of tombs Sometimes songs have deeper meanings And are worth thousand times as much If happiness is a journey Why does it feel like a destination? Excellent ending, I absolutely loved it. Poems that end in questions are thought provoking and always have a bigger meaning then just sounding pretty, it had a purpose. Wonderful. |
| Meski Addict Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 14856 | |
| snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912 | Wow... I posted this one like... ages ago.  Thank you, guys. And I_worship_tre_Cool, thank you for your very detailed opinion to the poem. And the stages of blue thing, there are two meanings within one: One is the state of feeling blue for a long time, and the other one is the mood he often falls into on stage. |
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