The Drama Queen

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TrEsXBiAtChX12 King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3754	June 21st, 2006 at 09:20pm Anger To the supreme She hates Girls so Mean She hears Her really annoying voice She screams Does she have the choice Drama Is her life But stabs others Like a sharp Knife Her specialty Is making trouble You tick her off She'll make it double Her Guilty pleasure Is Gossip She finds rumors A hot topic She doesn't Know Left from Right She always does Start a fight Sometimes Her mind is in pain And loves To dance in the rain She thinks music Is so grand And is obsessed With a Drummer in a Band Don't try To make her paranoid She always knows When her emotions are toyed Most of the time Her heart breaks Even if you make The littlest mistake She is never peaceful Like a dove But she needs Is gentle love
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK! Jackass Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1019	June 21st, 2006 at 09:36pm Isn't wasn't too bad but the lines were kind of short. You need to make them a little longer. And more than just one word.
Addison Montgomery. Falling In Love With The Board Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 7078	June 22nd, 2006 at 10:47am Lines needed to be longer but the poem itself was fine.
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 22nd, 2006 at 10:50am I didn't like it. The rhyme was so forced in some places, example; Drama Is her life But stabs others Like a sharp Knife And you had no punctuacion, which makes it very hard to read.
Kitti Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 5688	June 22nd, 2006 at 11:00am Ella: I didn't like it. The rhyme was so forced in some places, example; Drama Is her life But stabs others Like a sharp Knife And you had no punctuacion, which makes it very hard to read. The rhythm was so choppy too...and the flow was off. And the biggest problem of all is that you're telling us something you should be showing us. Your figurative language is a little trite...stabbing and knives associated with drama and hatred? Heard it...didn't care then, why should I now? Make us care about what you're writing.
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	June 22nd, 2006 at 11:05am "She thinks music Is so grand And is obsessed With a Drummer in a Band" Being obsessed with a drummer in a Band makes you a Drama Queen?
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 22nd, 2006 at 12:11pm I_worship_tre_Cool: "She thinks music Is so grand And is obsessed With a Drummer in a Band" Being obsessed with a drummer in a Band makes you a Drama Queen?
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538	June 22nd, 2006 at 12:19pm It was an ok poem. The idea behind it was good and it showed a promising effort. Maybe if the lines and ideas were developed just a little further it would flow better. But keep writing and good luck.
daisy_rock Idiot Age: - Gender: - Posts: 781	June 22nd, 2006 at 12:29pm The poem was good. peoms can be all shapes and sizies, lough i know u wanna at that but thats okey but yeah...........peoms are the poets way of feeling and they can be that short, so how old are u that was really good
tomamazon GSBitch Age: 29 Gender: Female Posts: 68084	June 22nd, 2006 at 12:33pm I_worship_tre_Cool: "She thinks music Is so grand And is obsessed With a Drummer in a Band" Being obsessed with a drummer in a Band makes you a Drama Queen? I must be a drama queen then...
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK! Jackass Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1019	June 22nd, 2006 at 02:01pm I_worship_tre_Cool: "She thinks music Is so grand And is obsessed With a Drummer in a Band" Being obsessed with a drummer in a Band makes you a Drama Queen? Lmao. XDD
daisy_rock Idiot Age: - Gender: - Posts: 781	June 22nd, 2006 at 05:15pm I think she did good

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