Ms. Murder
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 38 | June 22nd, 2006 at 03:20pm One day I left them,
Those people who never cared.
I disappeared into another world,
That they never found.
I wandered around,
With not a care in the world.
Everything was different,
Yet it felt the same.
For no one cared about me,
Not ever were they concerned.
Then I left that place,
And went back to being me.
Although it didn’t matter,
What I tried to do.
They never paid attention ,
To those with you and me. |
snowcherry
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 3912 | June 22nd, 2006 at 03:57pm I didn't like the end too much,
because I think the flow was a bit off there,
but I love the idea and the rest of it.  |
Meski
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 14856
 | June 22nd, 2006 at 04:06pm It was OK! My favourite part was Then I left that place,
And went back to being me. |
Rhiannon.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 2999
 | June 22nd, 2006 at 04:09pm yeah, the end was a bit off, but i liked the rest for the most psart |
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019
| June 22nd, 2006 at 05:24pm Yeah, I also agree. The ending was off. But the rest was good. |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| June 22nd, 2006 at 06:01pm I think you could have put some more effort into that. It's unoriginal. Anyone can write it. |
Addison Montgomery.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 7078
| June 25th, 2006 at 11:37am End needs work but what teh hell.It rocks |
Dehren McGhengland
Rotting On Here
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 49206 | June 25th, 2006 at 11:52am Ella:I think you could have put some more effort into that. It's unoriginal. Anyone can write it.
Agreed. |
Emily-Cool
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 6657 | June 25th, 2006 at 11:55am yes the ending did spoil the poem, but I thought the rest was ok. |
tAcOs!-Jay
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 34
Gender: Male
Posts: 83 | June 25th, 2006 at 07:46pm it was ummm.....kool but almost everyone writes about that subject.....I write about that kind subject! the ending does need work....... |
