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Jordyn
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3976 | June 27th, 2006 at 01:12am Her words are like poison
Leaving you dumbfounded at the sound
How could so much hatred exist in one mind?
No one considers her emotions at times.
His kisses are like cigarettes
Becoming more addicting one by one
Leaving you breathless at the end.
How could she survive such a fatal touch?
There is no passion in their hearts,
Just lust, lies, and tricks.
Dirty people doing dreadful things
They're in too deep to get out alive
You see the crash, you feel the fall,
Funny how things work out like they do.
They know they're lost, they know who they miss
At times like this, you know what love is.
Day by day, memories made.
Month by month, memories fade.
Year by year, love ones lost.
Century by century, you hope to move on.
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First poem in about two months.
I miss writting. |
Garrett Hanlund
This Board Is My Home
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 30801
  | June 27th, 2006 at 01:18am I love it. I really have nothing to say/critisism, because I know nothing about what poems are supposed to be. |
Dead End Girl
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | June 27th, 2006 at 01:22am His kisses are like cigarettes
Becoming more addicting one by one
Wow.
Just...wow.
...Wow. |
Jordyn
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3976 | June 27th, 2006 at 01:25am Germ-Free Adolescent:I love it. I really have nothing to say/critisism, because I know nothing about what poems are supposed to be. Well thank you. 
Annie Victim:His kisses are like cigarettes
Becoming more addicting one by one
Wow.
Just...wow.
...Wow. Before I assume anything, good wow or bad wow? xD |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| June 27th, 2006 at 07:45am 
You seriously need to write more often. |
Meski
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 14856
| June 27th, 2006 at 07:47am I liked it, yes, especially the last verse |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| June 27th, 2006 at 10:51am Wow, the whole thing was excellent. The way you closed it was absolutely awesome as well. |
[Broken Pretty]
Idiot
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 572 | June 29th, 2006 at 10:35am amazing. |
Jordyn
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3976 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:13pm Ella:
You seriously need to write more often. I would, but I rarely come up with anything good. |
Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 6370 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:15pm I love it. You should seriously write more often.
Have you sent that to Eli, by any chance |
Jordyn
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3976 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:15pm MESKI:I liked it, yes, especially the last verse
Hardcore Panda!!1:Wow, the whole thing was excellent. The way you closed it was absolutely awesome as well.
Hah. Thanks, guys. I thought the last verse was kinda random. |
Jordyn
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3976 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:16pm high_on_juicy_fruit:I love it. You should seriously write more often.
Have you sent that to Eli, by any chance Nah. I don't really think it's worth her time. But thank you. |
DAMONE_doll_parts
Geek
Age: 103
Gender: Female
Posts: 266 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:17pm its a lot better than the ones i usually read. |
Dead End Girl
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:19pm Jordyn:Annie Victim:His kisses are like cigarettes
Becoming more addicting one by one
Wow.
Just...wow.
...Wow. Before I assume anything, good wow or bad wow? xD
Good Wow  |
Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 6370 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:21pm Jordyn:high_on_juicy_fruit:I love it. You should seriously write more often.
Have you sent that to Eli, by any chance Nah. I don't really think it's worth her time. But thank you. Well, I think she'd definitly want to hear it.....
I'm gonna send poems to her if you want me to send it...but if not, then thats cool.
You're welcome. |
Jordyn
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3976 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:26pm high_on_juicy_fruit:Jordyn:high_on_juicy_fruit:I love it. You should seriously write more often.
Have you sent that to Eli, by any chance Nah. I don't really think it's worth her time. But thank you. Well, I think she'd definitly want to hear it.....
I'm gonna send poems to her if you want me to send it...but if not, then thats cool.
You're welcome. You could. That'd be great.
I'm supposed to post her poems here, but I haven't gotten any yet. :/ |
Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 6370 | June 29th, 2006 at 02:30pm Jordyn:high_on_juicy_fruit:Jordyn:high_on_juicy_fruit:I love it. You should seriously write more often.
Have you sent that to Eli, by any chance Nah. I don't really think it's worth her time. But thank you. Well, I think she'd definitly want to hear it.....
I'm gonna send poems to her if you want me to send it...but if not, then thats cool.
You're welcome. You could. That'd be great.
I'm supposed to post her poems here, but I haven't gotten any yet. :/ hahah. Alright.
XD |
