loser_girl_riots
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
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Posts: 36 | July 13th, 2006 at 08:04pm the lies I told myself
to get my soul to hell
the same lie I told to you
I wish I didn't have to tell
wake me up from such a dream
mirrors make it look so deciving
things are not as they seem
stop me falling, still bleeding
lay me down in a rose bed
take my heart with the vines
gouge a ructed daggar into my head
take me away from this place
'cause the lies I told you
aren't as bad as lies I told myslef
I didn't know what to do
and I'll admit it I didn't know anything |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
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Posts: 179 | July 13th, 2006 at 10:27pm it was good.....i liked it.....rhyming was kinda forced...some of it didnt even rhyme....which is okay but if ur gonna rhyme then rhyme throughout the whole poem...u know.....n e ways i thought it was...good =D |
