Bat_Country_Chick
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 842
 | July 22nd, 2006 at 09:00pm His angel wings flew above me
As I laid in bed
I began to quiver with fear
He wispered I'll never leave you
His gental voice reasured me
His kind heart gave me hope
My fear became less
He wispered I'll never leave you |
Ghostie.
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 495
 | July 22nd, 2006 at 09:33pm Beautiful. Just as good as the first one. *thumbs up* =] |
Bat_Country_Chick
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 842
| July 22nd, 2006 at 10:26pm Thanks!! It feels good to hear that people actually love my writting. |
Rocking_Bass_Chick
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 15 | July 22nd, 2006 at 10:45pm I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i want another part please!!!!!! |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | July 23rd, 2006 at 10:50am It's nothing new. It's been used too many times before. |
Bat_Country_Chick
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 842
| July 23rd, 2006 at 05:10pm international_idiot:It's nothing new. It's been used too many times before.
I underdstand. |
whersermind
Geek
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 165
| July 23rd, 2006 at 05:16pm kind of redundant, but thats fine, some poems are like that
but in the begining, you made it seem as though you or whoever the poems about was scared of the thing above her....if it had been written from that um, perspective, point of view, whatever tis called, it would have been nice, as it is i find it odd and kinda hard to understand, or maybe tis just my headache....ill stop being a bitch now and leave.... |
Bat_Country_Chick
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 842
| July 23rd, 2006 at 05:19pm whersermind:kind of redundant, but thats fine, some poems are like that
but in the begining, you made it seem as though you or whoever the poems about was scared of the thing above her....if it had been written from that um, perspective, point of view, whatever tis called, it would have been nice, as it is i find it odd and kinda hard to understand, or maybe tis just my headache....ill stop being a bitch now and leave....
That's ok. I don't mind the comments. It helps be become better at writting poetry. |
Emily-Cool
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 6657 | July 23rd, 2006 at 05:37pm Yes, i didnt think the first one was anything special, this one isnt an amazing read either, but keep working on your writing  |
