IxAmxMe
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 | July 24th, 2006 at 09:34pm I can't take this anymore!
The lies so popular and "cool".
As if our honest lives were a bore.
As if the only part of life was war.
"You have to do these things to be perfect."
Why do we want to worry all the time,
about what we look like, or special effect,
to make everything else look like a train wreck.
No more acting please!
Why don't we care about what's on the inside.
It's like one big plauge of a bad disease.
It's now become the World's expertise.
Why are there so many labels?
Do we do it just to hurt?
Just make a little effort to turn the tables.
What ever we hear are just big fables.
We hear about the lives of our inspirations,
and how perfect they look and feel.
It's across every and all nations,
the urge and pull of our temptations.
It's just a world of manipulation.
I can't take this anymore!
The lies so popular and "cool".
As if our honest lives were a bore.
As if the only part of life was war. |
Inari
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Posts: 2538 | July 25th, 2006 at 05:33am I liked that.
Although it was a bit hard to follow in parts.
Might just be me though. |
IxAmxMe
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| July 25th, 2006 at 12:04pm finally! someone likes one of my poems! |
SugarGreen
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Posts: 3369 | July 26th, 2006 at 12:25am plauge = plague
Nore= No
It is an awesome poem. I epecially like :
"As if the only part of life was war."
"Nore more acting please!
Why don't we care about what's on the inside.
It's like one big plauge of a bad disease.
It's now become the World's expertise. "
(with the changes made... of course) |
whersermind
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 | July 26th, 2006 at 12:28am i love it. i've been thinking about someting similar lately. like, in thought form, not as in writing a poem like that...or is it a song? |
Peter Petrelli
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Posts: 4161 | July 26th, 2006 at 09:40am I thought that this one was pretty good.
But I really loved these lines; 'He hear s about the lives of our inspirations,
and how perfect they look and feel.
It's across every and all nations,
the urge and pull of our temptations.
It's just a world of manipulation.'
This one is a huge improvement. Good job  |
the_feeling_isn't_fear
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Posts: 201 | July 26th, 2006 at 09:42am nice |
IxAmxMe
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| July 26th, 2006 at 12:36pm I edited it. I made quite a few mistakes. It shpuld be pretty good by now. |
