IxAmxMe
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 | July 21st, 2006 at 03:04pm I see your face,
and I cringe inside,
because time can't be erased.
'Cause I feel like,
like I hurt you,
But you know I still love you.
And these feelings are hard to face.
But I must leave you now,
Now I'm crying,
'cause you're dyin'.
I can see it in your eyes.
The things you're trying to hide from me.
I can see it!
I can see it!
When you held me,
with your hands,
I felt so loved,
but I didn't understand.
I felt like I was mugged,
of that never-dying love,
right from my heart.
But you couldn't ever see it.
But I must leave you now,
Now I'm crying,
'cause you're dyin'.
I can see it in your eyes.
The things you're trying to hide from me.
I can see it!
I can see it! |
IxAmxMe
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| July 25th, 2006 at 05:20pm anyone? |
SugarGreen
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Posts: 3369 | July 26th, 2006 at 12:12am This is very well written. |
Peter Petrelli
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Posts: 4161 | July 26th, 2006 at 09:43am I quite liked this one too 
But... I think you could use a better word than 'cringe' in the first line. Even something like 'break' would sound better.
But overall I liked it. I thought it was catchy. |
Addison Montgomery.
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 | July 26th, 2006 at 11:36am It's emotional |
IxAmxMe
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| July 26th, 2006 at 02:21pm Chris is mine:It's emotional
yes, it is, very emotional. |
