Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | July 27th, 2006 at 12:14am The disease is multiplying
Catching under your skin
Leave behind the memories
Polished with one little sin
Take a train to nowhere
Fill your lungs with Hell
Then when it's all too late
Torch the bridge that fell
The moon will always shine
Directly over the hill
But here in the flat dirt
Your feet are standing still
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I wrote this when on a whim in like 2 minutes, so please. I don't want to
hear the same thing over and over with every poem that has a
rhyme scheme. If the flow sucks, I don't care. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | July 27th, 2006 at 05:15am I liked that.
Especially the second verse. |
Meski
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 14856
 | July 27th, 2006 at 05:23am I agree with Inari, it was very good and the best part was the second verse |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | July 27th, 2006 at 11:56am Wow, I liked that. And for the record, I thought the flow was good.  |
