Mr_Comp01001
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
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Posts: 67 | March 19th, 2006 at 04:34pm Died Alone
Three years now since you left us here,
To fend for ourselves, everything is clear;
You didn’t want to live for us or yourself,
You left us alone, put our lives on a shelf.
So winter came, raining jagged tears,
Of frozen grief, after so many years;
We received the news, from that foreign place,
You were cut down, shot in the face.
They brought you home on board the Melody,
An iron coffin floating on the sea;
You arrived in the presence of your only family,
Silent abandonment and tragedy;
Your funeral will be short and simple,
Empty of grief, devoid of people;
No one will care, or at least it won’t show,
You left us behind, and you died alone. |
Dead End Girl
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Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | March 19th, 2006 at 04:40pm I liked it.
Although, some of the rhymes did seem forced, it was very good.
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newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | March 20th, 2006 at 08:43am It was good.  |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| March 20th, 2006 at 02:53pm Oh Mistress, I Confess:I liked it.
Although, some of the rhymes did seem forced, it was very good.
I agree.  |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
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Posts: 179 | July 29th, 2006 at 11:09am it was fucking awesome! sry i feel like saying fuck and shit....lol well i liked it ignore all the negative comments it was good....biznatch =D |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | July 29th, 2006 at 11:31am Good. Not great, but it wasn't bad either. |
Hardcore_rock_fan
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
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Posts: 18 | July 30th, 2006 at 01:00am i liked the last verse
i thought the third verse was too forced |
Retro Suicide
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Posts: 103 | July 30th, 2006 at 01:06am Hardcore Panda!!1:Oh Mistress, I Confess:I liked it.
Although, some of the rhymes did seem forced, it was very good.
I agree.
I agree, too.
And it reminds, for some reason, of Edward Scissorhands. I don't really know why. It has a sort of, Tim Burton feeling to it.
Which, by the way, is good. I love Tim Burton. |
