TheWoe
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Posts: 12 | July 30th, 2006 at 09:49pm I saw him on a Friday outside some run down saloon
He was cryin over someone that he felt left much too soon
I said, 'Hey boy don't you cry tonight
let me take you out on this town.'
He looked at me and smiled as one last tear splashed off the ground
With half a wink he asked me what are you some kind of freak
I told him no, I guess I just feel your vibe is kinda deep
The moon hung over soho
and I counted 16 stars
I pointed at the brightest one and said 'Now that one's ours.'
He's a dandelion, up on his hill above the sea
He's not exactly everything I thought that he might be
He's a dandelion
He looks like everything I need
I thought he was a flower
but I found out he's a weed
He might just be poison
but I took him to my roof top
I said are you afraid of heights,
He said no I am not
I said 'Hey boy don't you lie to me, tell me everything you feel'
We danced around in circles,
He said 'I think we found something real.'
He's a dandelion, up on his cliff above the sea
He's not exactly everything I thought that he might be
He's a dandelion
He looks like everything I need
I thought he was a flower
but I found out he's a weed
Down in union square
I saw him walking all alone
I walked a little slower just so I'd remain unknown
He met someone on seventeenth that he knew her all too well
My little piece of heaven has a secret he won't tell
With half a smile he took her hand
and then they walked away
I realized I would not see my boy after today
I fell in love with a dandelion
and he's all I ever had
At first he looked so sweet
But in the end he tastes so bad
He's a dandelion, up on his cliff above the sea
He's not exactly everything I thought that he might be
He's a dandelion
He looks like everything I need
I thought she was a flower
But I found out he's a weed
Then I hold on, hold on, hold on
Hold on, hold on, hold on
And I tell myself
Hold on, hold on, hold on |
humpty*dumpty*was*pushed
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Posts: 45 | July 30th, 2006 at 10:05pm It's good  |
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Posts: 546 | July 30th, 2006 at 10:22pm Finally, this is probably the best poem I've ever read. It sounds more like a song, but nonetheless, I think it would be an excellent song. Maybe you should work on some instrument tabs and probably record this. I think it would turn out really nice. |
Retro Suicide
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Posts: 103 | July 31st, 2006 at 04:00am Rockaholic380:Finally, this is probably the best poem I've ever read. It sounds more like a song, but nonetheless, I think it would be an excellent song. Maybe you should work on some instrument tabs and probably record this. I think it would turn out really nice.
I totally agree with that.
Oh my. That was amazing. Totally my new favorite poem. And it sounds like the music my old band played. Which explains why I like this, because I wrote all of our songs and I think this sounds like what I write only a million times better. I love that metaphor, it's so clever. You are totally my new favorite poet, I want to see mroe from you. Let me know when you get more posted. |
Rockaway Beach
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Posts: 1279 | August 1st, 2006 at 12:45pm <3 I love it. |
Babi Kid Rachy
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Posts: 4512 | August 1st, 2006 at 12:48pm Woah...awesome poem, its one of the bestest too...  |
davey jones.
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  | August 1st, 2006 at 01:31pm He's a dandelion
He looks like everything I need
I thought he was a flower
but I found out he's a weed
That was perfect right there.  |
