Her Hips

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[Broken Pretty] Idiot Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 572	August 1st, 2006 at 06:29am Please, do not laugh. her hips bleed, unknowning what will happen next, her dark beating so slow, death couldnt be any closer. Screaming at the blood from her hips, Its all over, Its not even red, Anymore. tears from her eyes, drench her green shirt, till the she feels the water upon her chest, still not wanting any of this. the hurt, the pain, the tears, all real for her yet no body else hears her pleas for the end. death upon her now, the blue blood turning red, slowly slips away with the water down her leg, closing her eyes hoping for something better, that she'll never have.
[Broken Pretty] Idiot Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 572	August 1st, 2006 at 07:08am please, some one comment this.
Open Arms. Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 52	August 1st, 2006 at 11:36am I like it, but I mean, it's too sad. Happier poems are a better read in my opinion.
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786	August 1st, 2006 at 12:17pm It's okay. It didn't really flow and was a itty bit cliche.. but keep up the writing yo
FeeneyKid Jackass Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1325	August 1st, 2006 at 12:21pm O-o bleeding hips... like lips but... hm... interesting. Why are her hips bleeding anyways? I don't know... Anywhoo... Tis a grood poem
Toxic Teeth Idiot Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 645	August 1st, 2006 at 12:29pm Why would i laugh? It was well written...i like it!
Babi Kid Rachy King For A Couple Of Days Age: 31 Gender: Female Posts: 4512	August 1st, 2006 at 12:30pm Thats actually quite good, well done
rollerpig GSBitch Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283	August 1st, 2006 at 03:06pm Purification ECT/DDT/409: It's okay. It didn't really flow and was a itty bit cliche.. but keep up the writing yo -nods- yeah .. But .. why do her Hips bleed? o_0
11th Street Kid King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3645	August 1st, 2006 at 04:24pm Maybe she's cutting her hips...? I quite liked some parts but I think you should go back and check all of it because some bits didn't make sense.
paper shoes This Board Is My Home Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 34269	August 1st, 2006 at 04:26pm To me it sounds like rape. I like this poem.
11th Street Kid King For A Couple Of Days Age: - Gender: - Posts: 3645	August 1st, 2006 at 04:29pm Rape? Yeah.. that makes sense now..
No One Likes You Bitch Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 14	August 1st, 2006 at 06:09pm I loved it<3
*they_call_me Ri* Geek Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 177	August 1st, 2006 at 07:25pm Harlequin Girl: To me it sounds like rape. I like this poem. me likey and agree ^^^^
12 Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 41	August 1st, 2006 at 07:33pm This poem is really good! I love it!
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	August 2nd, 2006 at 05:32am It's okay, I suppose. Very cliché though.
Emily-Cool Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 6657	August 2nd, 2006 at 05:55am yes, i thought it was ok
[Broken Pretty] Idiot Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 572	August 3rd, 2006 at 07:52am its about some one cutting their hips... me i needed to get it out of my mind.. thank you for the comments.

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