cool kids (they suck!).

im currently at school, meant to be doing some work but i cant be bothered oh well. i just wrote this. i was inspired by an ex-friend as i walked by her on my way to the bathroom. she just stares and some what influenced by my friend and her ex-friend relationship: murderous.
by the way: i dont think its any good but i wanted to see others opinions.

cool kids (they suck!)

nothing compares to the hatred i feel for you.
laying in my bed, this doesnt make sense.
school, its all a different story.
your eyes just follow me around.

im never gonna be as "cool as you"
not that i want to know.
im one of those weird kids to you,
just 'cause you think you're so cool.

finding my place, in life.
im finally happy.
not angry, like you made me.
this is no guilt trip.

making me feel better with each and very step,
away from you.
happiness can find it place in my mind,
forgetting you.

you, cool kid: you suck!

it's true...
They suck ..
especially when they used to not be cool.

I don't like it at all. It doesn't flow right.

And you might wanna be more descriptive and use better wording and such.. =/ The topic of it is kinda juvenile.


Do I even make any sense here? I'm hoping so.

thanks for the comment.
i knew it didnt make flow or sense.
sorry, guys.

[broken pretty]_.:

thanks for the comment.
i knew it didnt make flow or sense.
sorry, guys.

Ah. Go and make me feel bad why don't you. ;__;


Keep it up though. You'll improve with practise

Paying in Naivety:

[broken pretty]_.:

thanks for the comment.
i knew it didnt make flow or sense.
sorry, guys.

Ah. Go and make me feel bad why don't you. ;__;


Keep it up though. You'll improve with practise

lol. sorry. i have written others and posted them here and in my journal and have thought them better.
oh well. i just needed to get that rant outta my head.

its ok i guess i like it ill give you a clapping dude cuz hes just...idk the clapping dude and hes just idk..

Cool kids don't suck.
But your poem sure does.

Ella:

Cool kids don't suck.
But your poem sure does.

no sir if u are a chick idc i call everyone sir

no sir you suck this poem fucking rocks whre the hell have you been

I think this poem needs to flow a little more... with a little more rhyme. However, the basic point comes across me, and I know what you mean. It may not be good, but it sure gets a lot off your chest when you're inspired to write something... there's always revising and making it better. I do that sometimes with my poetry. Too bad none of it is worthy enough to be on here.

radioactive:

Ella:

Cool kids don't suck.
But your poem sure does.

no sir if u are a chick idc i call everyone sir

no sir you suck this poem fucking rocks whre the hell have you been

It actually sucks. Even the Spelling.
Ella doesn't.

radioactive:

Ella:

Cool kids don't suck.
But your poem sure does.

no sir if u are a chick idc i call everyone sir

no sir you suck this poem fucking rocks whre the hell have you been

Wow. The metaphores sure stand out.
I've been here much longer than you.
You know, back in the time where there was still some decent poetry here?
And where people didn't compliment others people's poetry just to boost their ego.

Rockaholic380:

I do that sometimes with my poetry. Too bad none of it is worthy enough to be on here.

Did someone tell you that?

[broken pretty]_.:

you, cool kid: you suck!

^ that's very good!

im sorry.
i thought it would be nice to post some of my poem thing-y hear.
if you dont wanna read this shit, dont.
fine.
please dont insult my thoughts and feelings.
i just wanted to see if any one liked it.
SORRY!

It wasn't that bad.