Arcane-Inamorata
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 3278
 | August 17th, 2006 at 01:28pm Hey GSBians! So... this is my second poem that i've posted on here.
If any of you have a good idea for a title, let me know.
I feel you all over me,
Hands are searching,
And our sould mix together as one.
I'm going crazy,
And I wake up from my nightmare.
A fragile kiss of momentary bliss.
Tell me why oh why,
I'm not dreaming of him.
Life goes by way too fast baby
Let's make the best of this.
Kiss me, lets make this last.
I know this can't last forever,
But why don't you try?
My psychotic nature gets the best of me,
And I'm left alone in fear.
Wake me up and show me you care.
Constructive criticism always welcome. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | August 17th, 2006 at 01:29pm I liked that.
It seemed a bit different to what's usually posted.
Simple and yet mature. |
i worship billie joe
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5509 | August 18th, 2006 at 12:29pm loved it |
rollerpig
GSBitch
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 62283 | August 18th, 2006 at 01:52pm I quiet like it. Could imagine it as a song kinda.
Not perfect, but keep writing! |
