6 Feet Below- dedicated to a friend (No she's not dead.)

It's actually a song, I havent edited it yet. I just want to see if its any good. I'll take constructive critisism too. Always a good thing.

Okay...

6 Feet Below- by Kris. L
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*Instrumental opening*

I remember those days
When I'd sit alone
With nothing to do
And nowhere to go
... But that's long gone
There I would sit
for hours on end,
missing the people
I thought were my friends!
But I was wrong

Rip out my hair
and tape my eyes shut
I'm tired of being called
"Useless dumb fuck"
I'm tired of hearing,
"Your future is dead"
So bury me 6 feet down,
And no tears shall I shed.

*Instrumental for two bars*

So many times
I've counted my tears
screamed out loud
and no one would hear
But its over now.
I went to my shrink
and he calmly advised
that taking some advil
would open my eyes
But it didnt help somehow

Rip out my hair
and tape my eyes shut
I am not dying inside
I am stuck in a rut
I've done all my doings!
And my bleeding has bled,
so bury me 6 feet down,
no more tears will I shed.

And then you showed up
my heart stopped dead in its tracks
and I suddenly felt
that I could lean back
Cause you'd catch me if I fell
You erased my nightmere
And made it a dream
I guess not everythings
bad as it seems
No, not at all...

*instrumental bridge*

Now I no longer wish
that I could be dead
Now I can ignore
that voice in my head
cause your here for me
I can see past the storm!
I can see through to the light!
I know you dont lie
when you say it's alright.
Some how, I know it will be.

*They brought me down, you brought me up!*

You dug me up
from six feet below
You made me a path
showed me where to go
You took my hand
you revived my site
now I know everything,
everythings alright...

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Okay. Done.
I worked hard on it, so if it sucks, then... blarg.

Wow Kris. This song/poem is fucking awsome. You do have alot of Talent (Hint hint when I said talent).

Racha_K:

Wow Kris. This song/poem is fucking awsome. You do have alot of Talent (Hint hint when I said talent).

Thanks

i like it. 'Tis catchy. I'd love to hear it with music.

Thanks.