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robotchicken. Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8423	August 27th, 2006 at 01:24am My unfinished poetry screams out of its mind Your within my heart but you're something I cant find Metaphors and silly things coat my feelings Do my eyes cut the deepest or do my worthless meanings? You cant seem to see my hints and giveaways Stars circle my head on these timeless days As Im pregnant with this love growing inside me Im not of all cliché when I say "together we should be" This thing we so deeply have; its delicate Most of the time I think none of us can handle it Is it fair to say it's like satin against my skin? Maybe to rough, something it shouldnt have been Never a ryhme, never a reason Floating away to an alternate planet we should be in Knowing me Im to shy to say anything Till the end, hating myself for something Ill never begin ........... ...and yes the title is supposed to be that way. any comments would be nice, your opinions are all helpful.
Arcane-Inamorata King For A Couple Of Days Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 3278	August 27th, 2006 at 01:27am I like it. It flows nicely and sounds good. Very well written.
robotchicken. Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8423	August 27th, 2006 at 01:31am Thank you :]
Goodbye, Norma Jeane King For A Couple Of Days Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 4724	August 27th, 2006 at 01:36am Most of it flows nicely. I thought it kinda started losing some of it's good flow at the last few lines...but for the most part, I like it As Im pregnant with this love growing inside me Im not of all cliché when I say "together we should be" My favorite line.
Santa Billie Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 8285	August 27th, 2006 at 01:37am Writing poetry and being pregnant...literally? I'm confused, but I'm gonna try to think about this poem...
rollerpig GSBitch Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283	August 27th, 2006 at 05:05am I like it. A lot. :O
robotchicken. Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8423	August 27th, 2006 at 12:33pm Goodbye, Norma Jeane: Most of it flows nicely. I thought it kinda started losing some of it's good flow at the last few lines...but for the most part, I like it As Im pregnant with this love growing inside me Im not of all cliché when I say "together we should be" My favorite line. I thought so to, I was planing on working on it again :] .... That was my favorite line also ^_^
The Rev Addict Age: 38 Gender: Male Posts: 14004	August 27th, 2006 at 01:46pm i love it very well written <3
Inari King For A Couple Of Days Age: 37 Gender: Female Posts: 2538	August 27th, 2006 at 02:11pm That is absolutely beautiful. I loved it.
robotchicken. Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 8423	August 27th, 2006 at 04:18pm Thank you guys ^_^
°MorbidRose° Jackass Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1723	August 27th, 2006 at 08:15pm I adored it. I like this line: "Do my eyes cut the deepest or do my worthless meanings?" Loved it. The flow was very nic, ad it rhymed without force.

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