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rage;love;clark
Geek
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Gender: -
Posts: 494 | September 1st, 2006 at 09:00pm Try living like Marx in a cell with no bars
Afraid to escape because it’s much too far
Notchin off kills in the walls of his life
It all comes down to the edge of a knife
One for the young
And one for the old
And one for the ones that did what they’re told
Two for the life
And three for the death
And four for the ones that have no breath
Gun to the head
Better off dead
I’ll take you boy out behind the shed
Knife to the heart
It’s not a start
It’s my own personal form of art
Try living like me in a world with no home
Searching for compassion, I found none is shown
Greed for these things that I don’t have
I don’t have the money but put it on my tab
One for the men
And one for the dead
And one for the starving who were never fed
Two for the hate
And three for the greed
And four for the ones who got what the need
Gun to the head
Better off dead
I’ll take you boy out behind the shed
Knife to the heart
It’s not a start
It’s my own personal form of art |
just_call_me_dookie
Addict
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 12902
 | September 1st, 2006 at 09:01pm *claps* very good!  |
Arcane-Inamorata
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 3278
| September 1st, 2006 at 09:28pm wow... that was really awesome!
I really like how it flows. Well written!
*thumbs up* |
rage;love;clark
Geek
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Gender: -
Posts: 494 | September 1st, 2006 at 09:32pm Mike_is_sexy_86:wow... that was really awesome!
I really like how it flows. Well written!
*thumbs up*
thanks very much |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| September 1st, 2006 at 09:35pm That would be a wonderful fast hardcore punk song. It flows, it's catchy, the rhyming isn't forced. It's got this awesome fast, frantic feel about it, too.
You just keep on getting better with every song you write. |
davey jones.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 7018
 | September 1st, 2006 at 09:38pm Gah, that was great. I liked it. It was catchy. |
wellthatslovely
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2435 | September 1st, 2006 at 09:45pm I agree that it would make an amazing song.
If it is already, I'm sure it sounds great. |
rage;love;clark
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 494 | September 1st, 2006 at 09:53pm goah, thanks everybody! |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | September 2nd, 2006 at 05:47am That was absolutely awesome. I could feel the emotion in it, and it flowed beautifully. Wow. This really is one of your best. |
rage;love;clark
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Gender: -
Posts: 494 | September 2nd, 2006 at 07:11am international_idiot:That was absolutely awesome. I could feel the emotion in it, and it flowed beautifully. Wow. This really is one of your best.
sweet! if II likes it, it must be good... thanks so much! |
