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King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 3386 | September 8th, 2006 at 03:58pm I miss u i love u i want u here but you arent here i love u and i now u love me
i hope u like me now dad hope u are proud of me.. I miss u to mutch i WANT u here Dad
I now im not the real me u now but this is me now
I hope u are proud of me and my sister
Why dad did u die? i miss u i cant live whit out u
i want u here agen i feel like im lonely fore the pass years
I now u cant come back nu i want u to now that i love u |
tomamazon
GSBitch
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 68084
  | September 9th, 2006 at 06:13am ....Sorry, its not u. its you.
Don't abbreviate in poetry.
I like the whole meaning of it, but it could've been written with a little more care. |
wake the dead.
This Board Is My Home
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 30440 | September 9th, 2006 at 07:02am It's not so much a poem as a...letter 
Please spellcheck. Chat speak will make others not take you seriously. |
