Hollow Screams

Hollow Screams

Invisible is the dream I am awake in
Nothing else is real in it just me
Am I starting to feel again?
It’s been so long
No, it’s my heart finally falling stone cold
I sit in the dark at night
That’s my life
When I speak I can only hear a dull roar ness,
No words, just blurs
I suppose that’s what everyone else hears when I speak to
Wondering what the noise is

You want to know?
It’s the bumps in the night
The flicker of the lights during a storm
The heartbreak from a love you never had
An invisible reflection of you
Trying to be you
But falling instead
No one ever stopping to try and pick me up again,
But I will carry on.

I like it a lot ^_^

Except, you should put more punctuation in.. like, say it to yourself, and wherever you pause, put a comma in.

But apart from that its awesome ^_^

Yeah, just needs some more punctuation and apart from that m'dear; well done.

It rolls well. I like it.

aww thanks guys ^_^

ily all

Wow. The words are good. Just like everyone else said. Needs a few commas here and there. Still awesome, though