goldmind2havok
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 41 | October 3rd, 2006 at 11:11am would you
wouldnt it be cool
just you and me
toghter forever
loving unconditonaly
would it work out
or be like before
i want someone who loves me
and wants so much more
not just sex
but me to
i wonder if thats something
you could do
would you change your ways for me
or would you have to let me be
we'll see how it plays out
but always remember
i love you more then a friend
always untill the very end |
The Rev
Addict
Age: 38
Gender: Male
Posts: 14004 | October 3rd, 2006 at 10:18pm Im sorry but i didn't like it..
at all. |
Love my insanity
Jackass
Age: 93
Gender: Female
Posts: 1591 | October 3rd, 2006 at 10:35pm Maybe add more lines, more complexity. |
goldmind2havok
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 41 | October 4th, 2006 at 09:37am yeah, well.. i really only write for me.. and thats why. but its all good. no one ever said you had to like it. thanks for the comments tho. i'll work on it. (i know its something i need to work on, my mom even told me.. but i just have problems with it.) |
