A few songs that I wrote.

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DudeO
King For A Couple Of Days
DudeO
Age: 31
Gender: Male
Posts: 2543

Mibba
October 11th, 2006 at 09:37pm
Thanks for reading.

This first one's called In My Bedroom. It is NOT a dirty song, for those sick minded.

Secluded behind these four big walls
heavy breathing rise and fall
The crashing tune of musics song
the only place where I'm not wrong

The war below grows violent still
My floor vibrates with cries so shrill
behind a rectangle made of wood
Alone and happy, the way I should.

Chorus one.

Listen closely,
hear my prayer
let no one
come up the stairs
so I can sit relax, unwind,
and leave my problems far behind.

I talk to that poster above my head
they never talked back, but listened instead
I pick up the controller and play out the mad,
then hide my head in a pillow and cry out the sad.

Write down some lyrics, then scratch them all out
Wonder what they were screaming about
ignore it, then floor it right into a dream
imagine that things arent as bad as they seem

Chorus 2

Over time my eyes will dry
I'll have no reason left to cry
All my feelings have been used
to get me by, to help my through

Listen closely, hear my prayer
Let no one come up the stairs
So I can sit, relax unwind,
and leave my problems far behind.

Far behind...

THE END.

Song two- Why havent I? Everyone else has.

The world is changing every day they say,
everybody does.
I didnt think anything of it,
I liked the way it was.
But then I left and everyday I called to hear whats new,
and the longer that i stayed away, the heavier my heart gew.

And I knew,

gone away,
far away,
it seems like just yesturday,
you were there,
they were there,
Everything the way it should be.

He said "People change, you know its true."
And I hung up in my fear
I remembered all the things we did
I knew the end was near
She said "I regret the things we did" And I felt
tears fill my eyes,
My life was changing, rearanging,
I felt our friendship die
And then I cried...

*Instrumental. *

Reach back, Reach back, go back.. Way back.
Am I still there in your memory?
Go Back, Go Back, Reach back, Way back
Am I still there in your memory?

THE END AGAIN.

My third song is called High Strung.

After my band.

OH my god, the walls are moving!
Hoyl shit, the floor is gone
I can hear my father talking
tellinb me what I've done wrong
Maybe thats why I've become

Chorus
High Strung, High strung, like its been this all along,
High Strung, High Strung, Bleeding but the blood is gone.

Another day another hour
Another minute going by
I can hear my mother screaming
and My father says goodbye
But why wont anybody cry?

Chorus again....

And then it just ends. Hah.

Like em?
Dead End Girl
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Dead End Girl
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219
October 12th, 2006 at 11:07am
The first two, the rhymes seem very forced. It distracts.
The third one is the best out of them all, but the chorus seems...odd xD


So cha' Cool
immadick
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
immadick
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 82
October 12th, 2006 at 11:23am
I like the third one, ^_^
Its awsome.
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