rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | October 28th, 2006 at 11:36pm Don’t listen to my words for they have no meaning
Just a partial sentiment to a soul-less being
I’m a useless waste of a hundred trillion tiny cells
I try to think I’m helpful but I know damn well
I’m a pathetic excuse for something called man
I just don’t fit in with God’s master plan
It’s tough to foresee what I’ve got in store
Because I don’t think I could take any more |
Peter Petrelli
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Posts: 4161 | October 29th, 2006 at 06:40am 'I’m a useless waste of a hundred trillion tiny cells'
I didn't like that line as much. I think you could rephrase it to make it better. I'm not too sure how at the moment though... *thinks* I think it's the word 'trillion'.
But otherwise I thought it was good, very simple but it wasn't rushed or forced. |
rage;love;clark
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Posts: 494 | October 29th, 2006 at 08:07am Ginger Nuts:'I’m a useless waste of a hundred trillion tiny cells'
I didn't like that line as much. I think you could rephrase it to make it better. I'm not too sure how at the moment though... *thinks* I think it's the word 'trillion'.
But otherwise I thought it was good, very simple but it wasn't rushed or forced.
thank you very much |
