robotchicken.
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Age: 34
Gender: Female
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 | October 30th, 2006 at 08:41pm Dreaming and Things
The sun shone down to the Earth
As if to burden the trees with its rays
Warm air brushes against your face
In this dream,
So dead were my eyes in the darkness
I could hardly see,
You stare out into the nothingness
Hallucinations begun to engulf us again
And we were gone
Nightmares and Questions
How poetic are my words?
Confined like viles of blood
Contourted like the faces of demons
Showing snarling teeth
And almost black in unknowledgeable metaphors
Seemingly, endless days pass
And I am still uncertain
How do I fill the voids in your mind?
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I would like your opinion on these to see how good they are. You can correct my spelling also if my words are misspelled. Thank you :] |
love.
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Posts: 2844 | October 31st, 2006 at 01:05pm i heart them<3 |
robotchicken.
Falling In Love With The Board
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| October 31st, 2006 at 05:49pm Thank you! :] |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
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Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | November 1st, 2006 at 02:47pm I love. Short but sweet. However, I think you spelt 'viles' wrong... I think it might be 'vials'. But that's not a criticism. |
robotchicken.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 8423
| November 1st, 2006 at 11:41pm Ginger Nuts:I love. Short but sweet. However, I think you spelt 'viles' wrong... I think it might be 'vials'. But that's not a criticism. oo, I didnt even think it was "vials" lol. Now I see.....hmm "vile" I think has a different meaning :/ damn. Disgusting or something might be the def. of "vile" Thank you :] Im usually really good with words n' stuff I just dont think sometimes XD |
