Frame Life in Moments, Hang it on Memories

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King For A Couple Of Days
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Mibba
October 27th, 2006 at 05:03pm
Frame Life in Moments, Hang it on Memories

Far from picture perfect,
But happy as it seems,
Captured in a steel frame
On my desk

Moments worth living for
As the rest of the time
Is a complete waste
From what I
Can gather

Of course,
I could be wrong.
But then again,
It never matters.

Blue skies
In all those photos
Not a cloud
Not a single care.
I should know,
I’ve looked at them
So many times.

Far from perfect,
But they are not meant
To be pictures of life.
Just memories
of moments.

And I can make
Absolutely nothing
Out of this.
But it’s ok because
It never really mattered.





Yeah...so...I have no idea really Cool
Commenst? Thoughts?
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
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Gender: Female
Posts: 4161
October 28th, 2006 at 06:34am
I really liked how some lines flowed and others broke away. I know it probably wasn't intentional, but it created a disjointed feeling that complimented the structure. It breaks the poem apart so you can think about individual lines. I especially loved the last line. Very Happy
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King For A Couple Of Days
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Mibba
October 28th, 2006 at 03:08pm
Thank you. Well, in fact, it was. Do you know how hard it is to learn how to make it seem unintentional?? Wink
I was afraid that it wasn't "good enough" though. That it was too simple or blunt (or whatever). So thanks a lot, dear. ^_^
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Mibba
October 28th, 2006 at 07:07pm
I adore the last two stanzas and the impact that they make on the rest of the poem. Even though it was simple it definitely worked. Very Happy
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King For A Couple Of Days
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Mibba
October 30th, 2006 at 03:38pm
Thanks, my fine soulmate =) I'm glad you think so, means a lot to me.
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October 30th, 2006 at 04:02pm
Love it ^_^
Its really nice/great Very Happy
love.
King For A Couple Of Days
love.
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October 31st, 2006 at 01:08pm
i really liked it!!!
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
What's in a name?
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451

Mibba
November 2nd, 2006 at 01:22pm
*bows* Thank you.

(next time, could you two be more precise and tell me why you liked it? k, thanks Wink)
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