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Blood on the sidewalk
blood at the door
blood on the corner
blood on the floor

blood in the hallway
blood in the kitchen
blood on the porch
see the blood glisten

Santa got crazy
with the new year coming
here he comes now
so you'd better start running

lol, i knew we should never trust santa. that's good

Wow, man. That's creepy and I love it. =D

awsome

I think that it's too repetitive, and sounds far too forced.

Ginger Nuts:

I think that it's too repetitive, and sounds far too forced.

Ditto. Plus the rhyming is as rhyming often is around here. Banal. Also it has no meaning whatsoever, no depth and it's not funny. So that leaves us with, well, nothing really. I sure hope that you can do better and I really, really hope that the people thinking this is awesome get a grip. Because the last thing we need here are amateurs praising “poems” that so obviously suck. (No offence)

What's in a name?:

Ditto. Plus the rhyming is as rhyming often is around here. Banal. Also it has no meaning whatsoever, no depth and it's not funny. So that leaves us with, well, nothing really. I sure hope that you can do better and I really, really hope that the people thinking this is awesome get a grip. Because the last thing we need here are amateurs praising “poems” that so obviously suck. (No offence)

You know what? Constructive critisism is alright, but you shouldn't tell her it sucks. It makes you seem like a bit of a jerk who thinks you're so much better than she is. And if some people think it's awesome, who gives a shit? So, they don't have the same opinion as you. No need to call them "amateurs" as if, once again, you're "better" than they are.

I know that it was rude to say that it sucked but my vocabulary is not extended enough to contain a more suitable word/synonym for what I wanted to express. I do think that I’m much better than her actually (when it comes to poetry) but it’s not nice to put it like that. Yes, I could have been nicer, and that I had had a bad day is no excuse. Serious poets on here do as well as people who want to help her improve her poetry. Getting told that what you write is awesome when it isn’t is not such a good thing. Of course people are entitled to their own opinion. I can in fact call them armatures since that are what they are. They are not professionals who get paid to write poetry and make a living of it. I know nothing of them personally and do not consider myself to be better then them. I do however consider myself to be better than them when it comes to poetry. Of course that is to some extend a matter of opinion, but still. Anyway, I do apologize for my rude behaviour and once again I must stress that I didn’t mean it in an offensive way.

I agree with both of what What's in a name? said.
The poem was boring, and wasn't a very enlightening subject. I'm sure it was meant to be humorous, but it really wasn't. It lacked imagery and metaphors. The poem had no variety of vocabulary, and was very redundant and repetitive. The concept was boring, and had no actual meaning.

Overall, I disliked it. It was not good, nor awesome.

I believe that if you tried to come up with a more meaningful concept, and tried to add metaphors, imagery, and a larger variety of words, you could write much better poems.

<3 Sandy

I didn't like it.
Sorry

It's ok. Very different & that's good.
Definitely stands true to the name

And I'd like to point out that this board is for opinions- no one person is right && that a poem has no real rules so it can be about anything or absolutely nothing. Anything is poetry... in fact almost everything is poetry.

GrOuChOnThEcOuCh:

Anything is poetry... in fact almost everything is poetry.

There's a difference between poetry and something being poetic.

hey ehem.....ignore these wannabe mods they think there so good at everythin it was a cool poem and it was funny, funnier than anyothers i've seen, but is it of Futurama

If you want to become good at all you should ignore people like beans. Just a tip.

And what some of you don’t seem to get is that one can be good or bad at poetry and that poetry can suck or be awesome. I guess some of you watch Idol? (American Idol maybe). You know, all persons who go to the audition can’t sing, and that’s not a matter of opinion. They sing false, they don’t deliver and/or they don’t know the lyrics well. Those who make it and become the last 5 or 6 persons in the show have talent. Who’s the best of them that is a matter of opinion because all of them sing well. You get what I’m saying? Same thing with poetry. Enough said.

You're only [[Insert word here aka beautiful]] if you believe it.

=D

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Hello, newbie! Just a word of advice! So called spaming isn’t appreciated.
You are supposed to say something about the poetry, not try to make friends. At least not on this thread .