Radio Station

This is not a poem. It’s a lyric. Keep that in mind.
Feedback is encouraged.

Radio Station

I tuned in today to the noises
Of cries and screams and cursing voices
Mixing with background sound.

The remote control seems wrecked
Or perhaps it’s just a manufacture defect
But the volume crowds my ears.

Sing song voices of isolation
Hymning about desperation
On this track without salvation,
They reach out through broken speakers
In bedded in the unwritten lyric.
Which by the way is far too common.
Far too common.

So out of tune the music plays
A bitter tasting, shrilling symphony
Going ever on in the wrong key.

I’ll buy some plugs tomorrow
To block out this little town’s distress
In hope that it will affect me less.

Keep it out to keep me distanced
As I grab a pencil, jotting down words
Rewriting the music I’ve heard.

Sing song voices of isolation
Hymning about desperation
On this track without salvation,
They reach out through broken speakers
In bedded in the unwritten lyric.
Which by the way is far too common.
Far too common.

I'm not really too sure what a "lyric" is. Is it like a song or something? Anyways, it was pretty good. And a LOT more easier to understand, in my opinion. But no, that doesn't mean it was simple.

I tuned in today to the noises
Of cries and screams and cursing voices
Mixing with background sound.

The remote control seems wrecked
Or perhaps it’s just a manufacture defect
But the volume crowds my ears.

Sing song voices of isolation
Hymning about desperation
On this track without salvation,
They reach out through broken speakers
In bedded in the unwritten lyric.
Which by the way is far too common.
Far too common.

These parts are definitly my favorite parts. I like the structure of the rhyming. Like, where for 3 lines (in the bigger part) where it'd rhyme but then break off and go to something else. Pretty nifty. ^_^

Keep it out to keep me distanced
As I grab a pencil, jotting down words
Rewriting the music I’ve herd.

I'm just guessing you might've meant heard. Not herd. Unless you were meaning a herd of something. Anyways, this part really made it work well. I don't think it would've quite been as good without it. It just had some sorta smoothness and good work in it.

=D

You know. Lyric? As in song text?

Thank you, thank you. I do my best. As you can tell I’m not one of those who think that rhyming always is horrible. I like rhymes when it’s properly done.

Of course I meant “heard”. Stupid Microsoft Word auto correcting words. =P Stupid me being too tired do notice… *fixes* Anyway. Thanks. You have no idea how much I appreciate that you take time to give proper feedback.

That was simply amazing and I'd love to hear it with music behind it or something. The flow was simply beautiful.

Keep it out to keep me distanced

The repetition - perfect.

Overall they were just perfect lyrics; I wouldn't change anything.

'A bitter tasting, shrilling symphony'. Aaaaah, I love that line.

Awesome.

A couple of things. 'Effect' should be 'affect', I think. If you are 'affected' by something, it means you react to it. An 'effect' is a consequence.
And 'hymning' isn't a word. Just to mention.

Lyrics can be really hard to write well, but this owns.

I’m quite found of it myself. ^_^

You’re absolutely right, Ellen dear. *Changes effect into affect*
Of course it is! I just invented it! Besides, Microsoft Word accept it as a word

*Bows* Thank you.

Electrocore Panda.:

That was simply amazing and I'd love to hear it with music behind it or something. The flow was simply beautiful.

Keep it out to keep me distanced

The repetition - perfect.

Overall they were just perfect lyrics; I wouldn't change anything.

Hopefully you will some day. If my band never becomes famous I’ll give you the songs anyway.

Except for the little word mix up that Ellen pointed out that is ~.^ But thank you so much.