Dear Whoever

Dear Whoever

I want to tell you everything
and nothing.
I want you to know who I am
and I don’t want you to know a thing about me.
I want to scream
but I never want to say another word.

Could it be that I’m fine like this?
Or am I just too far gone?

If there was a way
Just one ounce of hope
I would walk it
I would steal it
and make it all mine.
Selfishly, without regrets.

Perhaps my voice is set on mute,
but there're still thoughts
crowding my mind.
The pencil can still write
what won’t be spoken.
All words will spill,
splashing confessions
onto my papers.
I will pour it all out
Selfishly, with no regrets.






Perhaps a bit different from what I’ve been posting lately.
I found the first two stanzas and realized that I had an unfinished poem I’d forgotten about.
When I looked at it I remembered and finished it off.
What do you think?

It's lovely. It's poems like these that make me come to this thread. Honestly- good poems are refreshing. I could list everything I liked about it but...I would pretty much just quote the poem.

Thank you . I’m glad you like it that much. Well, no need to quote the entire poem if you liked the whole concept.
The important thing is that you said so. That’s also some kind of feedback, no? ^_^

I loved it.
But there was something about it that was a little off, but I can't quite place it.
I'm sorry this is all the feedback I have for it. XD

Also, the last line, I don't think it needs to be italicized. But that's just me.

I adored the message - but I agree there was something missing. I'm not too sure what. I think maybe that it was a little simplistic - technically it was almost flawless, but the vocabulary was a little basic. Yes, I know you're not originally English, and that's pretty amazing; but a thesaurus is always a help.

But don't change this.
'All words will spill,
splashing confessions
onto my papers.
I will pour it all out
Selfishly, with no regrets'

I loved that part.

Thank you, sweeties

I know what you guys mean but keep in mind that I begun it long ago (probably when I was 16, and as you know I’m 18 now).
I wrote the last part recently to finish it off and I wanted to try to make it turn out as it would have turned out back then. If that makes sense
Hence the simplicity.

Yeah, Ellen, it is and I do occasionally use one too.