Emily Kaulitz
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 5014
  | November 14th, 2006 at 12:22am "I'm going to give him a call"
I see you walk down the hall,
I say to myself "I'm going to give him a call"
I go to my last class,
And when it is over I can call you at last.
When the bell rings I hurry home,
I go over and pick up the phone.
I dial your number anxiously,
As I waited for you to pick up impatiently.
As he picks up the phone, I hear a girls voice in the backround,
I just sat there without saying a sound.
I finally decide to talk,
And ask him if he would like to go for a walk.
But then I find out he's has a girlfriend,
My dreams quickly end.
Another poem by me. Meh, Not that good. |
sailor spaikae!
Jackass
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Gender: Female
Posts: 1047
| November 14th, 2006 at 03:27pm It's quite nice.
As he picks up the phone, A hear a girls voice in the backround,
I just sat there without saying a sound.
I think you meant I hear a girl's voice, you may want to edit it a little. |
Emily Kaulitz
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 5014
| November 14th, 2006 at 03:30pm Oh oops. |
sailor spaikae!
Jackass
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 1047
| November 14th, 2006 at 03:35pm Don't worry about it.
Everyone makes typos.
I like the fact it's not your typical 'deep' poem.
Nor ius it particularly shallow.
It's something alot of teenage girls can relate to.
I like it lots. |
Emily Kaulitz
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 5014
| November 14th, 2006 at 08:18pm Thank you. |
Miss_Minority039
Geek
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 332
| November 14th, 2006 at 08:57pm i like it *10* if i could vote but i can't so yeah but it's good |
