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Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | November 7th, 2006 at 04:37pm Wow. It's been ages since I last posted. I think I actually lost my touch with poetry.
Anyway, my creative writing course in University inspired me to give it another shot. Whether that was a good or bad thing, I'll let you decide.
There were whispers of
autumn in your fingertips
the day that we met:
the crisp breeze of your
words, the brown hue of your smile,
the frost-glazed friendship.
You wound grounded leaves
around your lifeline and turned
them into snow drifts -
and they fell like tears
out of my eyes, into my dreams,
to decorate my sleep.
There was an offer
of re-birth in your palm as
you stretched it out for
clouds to decorate.
And the skies scrolled over it,
dyeing it orange.
You presented me with
gifts of a dying season
and bound it tightly
between the clutch of
your henna palm and mine - white
like the innocence
in your lightened smile.
You were always my haiku
in all its meanings:
complex to structure,
ambiguous in meaning,
beauty in snapshots. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
 | November 7th, 2006 at 05:47pm  You have so not lost your touch with poetry. I love this poem and I worship you from now on =P
I adore the imagery. What lovely metaphors. *sighs happily*
Brilliant choice of words and marvellous phrasing. And it flows perfectly. ^.^
Um, can I keep it??  |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| November 7th, 2006 at 08:43pm OMG PERFECT ENDING AND PERFECT EVERYTHING AND I THINK I MIGHT JUST PASS OUT FROM ALL THE PERFECTNESS.  |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | November 8th, 2006 at 06:47am *passes out*
Marry me. |
miau
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 4469 | November 8th, 2006 at 09:20am Electrocore Panda.:OMG PERFECT ENDING AND PERFECT EVERYTHING AND I THINK I MIGHT JUST PASS OUT FROM ALL THE PERFECTNESS.
Exactly.  |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | November 8th, 2006 at 11:07am
Oh my God.
I seriously can't thank you guys enough.
You've given back that last bit of faith.
I wish I could marry you all. Lol. But that would be illegal.
ILY. |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | November 8th, 2006 at 12:37pm Wow wow wow.
That was beautiful. I'm glad you've started writing again.  |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | November 8th, 2006 at 02:48pm 11th Street Kid:Wow wow wow.
That was beautiful. I'm glad you've started writing again.
Thank you.
So much. |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| November 9th, 2006 at 08:21am Inari:
Oh my God.
I seriously can't thank you guys enough.
You've given back that last bit of faith.
I wish I could marry you all. Lol. But that would be illegal.
ILY.
Who's the god of a god? It thought you were the poetry god. So, are you talkin' to yourself or what? (j/k j/k)
It is legal somewhere I think... 
Btw, I'm "stealing" your poem. I'm gonna print it and put it in my "book" with my favourite poems. I assume that that is ok?
(No, I’m not gonna sell that “book”. It’s just for me so that I can keep all awesome poems I find =P.) |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | November 9th, 2006 at 03:19pm What's in a name?:
Who's the god of a god? It thought you were the poetry god. So, are you talkin' to yourself or what? (j/k j/k)
It is legal somewhere I think...
Btw, I'm "stealing" your poem. I'm gonna print it and put it in my "book" with my favourite poems. I assume that that is ok?
(No, I’m not gonna sell that “book”. It’s just for me so that I can keep all awesome poems I find =P.)
Ahaha. Nah, I'm no poetry God. There's got to be someone else out there that is even better than me at all of this.
Of course that's ok, sweetheart. |
Lissie!
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 7305
 | November 9th, 2006 at 03:24pm OMG. I printed this =D |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| November 9th, 2006 at 03:28pm Inari:What's in a name?:
Who's the god of a god? It thought you were the poetry god. So, are you talkin' to yourself or what? (j/k j/k)
It is legal somewhere I think...
Btw, I'm "stealing" your poem. I'm gonna print it and put it in my "book" with my favourite poems. I assume that that is ok?
(No, I’m not gonna sell that “book”. It’s just for me so that I can keep all awesome poems I find =P.)
Ahaha. Nah, I'm no poetry God. There's got to be someone else out there that is even better than me at all of this.
Of course that's ok, sweetheart.
Yeah, of course there is! Me!  No, but seriously, you have so incredible much talent.
Good. Thanks, dear. |
°MorbidRose°
Jackass
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 1723
| November 9th, 2006 at 04:14pm Words cannot even begin to describe how beautiful I found that poem to be.
I LOVED it.
The day you honestly lose your touch at poetry will be a dark day for all poets here on GSB.
[lol, I am SUCH a kiss ass.]
No, really. It was wonderful.
But I'm going to shut up now. [i'minoneofthoseweirdmoods...XD] |
snowcherry
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 3912 | November 13th, 2006 at 04:52am Awwww, that's so sweet.  |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | November 13th, 2006 at 05:08am My God, I seriously thought people had stopped commenting on this.
What's in a name?: Your talent could easily over-ride mine any day.
MorbidRose: Ahahaha.  Thank you.
Snowcherry: Thank you, angel. |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | November 14th, 2006 at 03:21pm Inari:11th Street Kid:Wow wow wow.
That was beautiful. I'm glad you've started writing again.
Thank you.
So much.
Thank YOU. |
Boosh Bananas
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 194 | November 15th, 2006 at 03:31pm wow..... |
