This Time It’s Farewell
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| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451  | This Time It’s Farewell There is an internal bleeding on my conscious. Would you help me? We could stitch sympathy back in place. So sharpen the needle with regrets, unbundled threads of disappointment and sew some decency onto my soul. Paint tears of shame down my cheeks, draw lines of worry across my forehead. Maybe you could even write a speech. Put words of sorrow in my mouth and make sure that I swallow, not just spit them out. But even after all this I’m still selfish enough to apologize. After all that I’ve done there is no hesitation when saying I’m sorry. Clearly you are not the one who needs this destructive, pathetic excuse for a relationship. Scars and wounds from your fulltime broken heart. What can you see? A pattern created by egocentric actions of mine. So practise on your goodbyes, think about a place for the ashes and choose your favourite hymn. Because I think it’s fatal this time. I don’t think I’m ever gonna be any better then this. You’ve been a great help and I truly appreciate all the tips, the constructive criticism and the feedback. I’m afraid it’s no use anymore though. Because I will never become a truly brilliant poet. I’ll just have to be happy with the talent I’ve got.  I’ll post poems every now and then and unless you’ll perish without them (unlikely) I’m semi retiring. (the poem is not about any of you btw). I’d like some feedback on this poem in any case. Thank you  ILY <333  Edit: scratch that everyone. I will keep posting as always. I was very down that week and it felt as if my poems didn’t really matter that much. I know better now, sorry for making such a fuss. Thank you all for you patience and support! It made all the difference in the world. ILY to bits! |
| Misanthropist Post Whore  Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 23279 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Yeah, unless people here get too upset or I get any better.  Seriously? Omg, thank you so much, dear. That really means a lot to me.Thanks ^_^ I like them a lot too. |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 |  Semi-retiring? Why that's ridiculous.  You know you're gonna have some stalkers on your hands once you do. Holy smokes I adore the first two stanzas. And the last line fits absolutely perfectly and gives it a very defined final thought. I love it so much. Just one very slight grammar correction: who needs this destructive |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Yes. No, not really, see reasons above^ . Stalkers? But I’m not gonna quit writing and posting, I’m just not gonna do it as often.Thanks, honey. And I wasn’t sure about the last line so thank you so much!  Oops *fixes* |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Maybe I can . It is indeed personal. The majority of my poems are. I’m not really retiring, I’m just not gonna be as active. I had no idea it did. I thought you just kind of liked it and nothing more. I’m so glad to know that you can relate, that’s real important to me. It’s ok. You don’t always have to criticise, you know. I’m just as happy when people let me know what they really like about my poem. I want to hear what’s good too, not only what can be improved.  ILY Ok, fair enough. I’ll put in a poll for you so all get to vote. If you really want me to I’ll keep posting like before. Otherwise I’ll post poems every now and then. Is that ok? |
| new.slang Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 764 | *waits for the poll* You cannot stop writing often.  |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Your wait is over. Of course I can, but if you feel strongly about it I'll keep on posting just as often as before. |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | It’s not that I don’t actually want to post. I had a long break during the summer and I have a lot to write about. It’s just that I don’t know if there’s a point since my poetry seem to have stopped at a level that’s great but not fantastic. I had no idea that you all cared so much for my poems. So it all comes down to what you guys want really. Because if I don’t get better, why post so often? If nobody really cares anyway. If you care it makes all the difference. I may not get better but at least I’ll contribute something to this thread (and to you). (hope I made sense ) |
| The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786  | What's in a name?:That makes sense to me. but seriously...whenever I think people have had enough of my crap or I just lose things to type about I just take a break then get into the flow when I feel the need to. Chaa... But I will seriously miss your poetry. |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | |
| The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786 | What's in a name?:o_o congrats  |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Thanks [/off topic] |
| Matt Smith Admin  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 31134 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Thank you. I needed that. A final push  Ok, everyone, I won’t retire. You’ve convinced me. I’ll never say such a stupid thing again. Sorry everyone |
| new.slang Idiot Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 764 |  Yay! I'm really glad. You write great poetry and that pushes me to keep writing. [/creepystalkerconfession] |
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