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rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	November 27th, 2006 at 09:48am I needed everything I needed so much more than This world Had to offer I needed so much more Who knows what’s in store for Me when You’re gone I needed everything I needed so much more than This world Had to offer I needed so much more Who knows what’s in store for Me when You’re gone Go hide in my room Delay my present doom I’ll Kill me Just to feel it I’ll stay in here for now Your voices are so loud it Drives me Insane I want to be alone All of my faults are shown Here in My hands I will end it all It can’t be my fault no No it Can’t be If I’m not here will you Still act just like you do when You think Of me Will you hang your head Regret that I am dead? You’re Lying If you say yes
rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	November 27th, 2006 at 08:25pm - Post has been erased because it was unnecessary bumping - (you know ppl always coment you your songs, be patient. - What's in a name?)
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	November 28th, 2006 at 07:35am I like it. Only I find the repetition of the whole first stanza to be a bit unnecessary. I like how you broke the sentences apart, it gives an interesting though, and I also like your wording* * ex: Delay my present doom I’ll Kill me Just to feel it If I’m not here will you Still act just like you do when You think Of me Nice job
rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	November 28th, 2006 at 08:52am What's in a name?: I like it. Only I find the repetition of the whole first stanza to be a bit unnecessary. I like how you broke the sentences apart, it gives an interesting though, and I also like your wording* * ex: Delay my present doom I’ll Kill me Just to feel it If I’m not here will you Still act just like you do when You think Of me Nice job thank you vurry much
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	November 28th, 2006 at 09:36am You're very welcome
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	November 28th, 2006 at 02:11pm I really liked it. It was emotional, but accessible in a poetic way. And strong. I especially liked the last stanza, it was blunt and kind of bitter.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	November 28th, 2006 at 04:39pm I can always count on your songs to be refreshingly simple. I loved the end like Ellen. And I actually liked the repetition of the first stanza, to be honest.
rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	November 28th, 2006 at 07:08pm about the first stanza(s) this is a song and the first time i go through the first stanza, all power chords are muted then i break out and repeat the stanza all the rest are a mixture of muted and ringing thanks to ginger nuts and electrocore panda, you rock where did you get your avatar, cuz i love +44
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	November 28th, 2006 at 07:18pm I made my avatar. And so I don't have to post in the other topic too, thanks about my name.
What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451	November 29th, 2006 at 09:50am rage;love;clark: about the first stanza(s) this is a song and the first time i go through the first stanza, all power chords are muted then i break out and repeat the stanza all the rest are a mixture of muted and ringing thanks to ginger nuts and electrocore panda, you rock where did you get your avatar, cuz i love +44 I see. Well, in that case, it doesn’t really matter that you repeated the first stanza. (I figured it was a song I just don‘t like repetition all that much, not even in songs because, in my opinion, it feels uncreative/dull =)
freedumb Idiot Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 617	November 29th, 2006 at 10:17am The last two stanzas are my favorite.. good job!
rage;love;clark Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 494	November 29th, 2006 at 11:18am [too young to die]: The last two stanzas are my favorite.. good job! thank you, they're my favorite too lol

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