Education as My Enemy

Education as My Enemy

Restless spasms twitch behind half a smile. Nausea floats
in veins tangling somewhere in my brain, making the stomach
a raging mess. Nervous quotations flickers through a
confusion cluttered mind. Headache makes analyses fail.

Motivation cramps inside the fingertips and footsteps
create a pattern of wrong turns across the wooden floor.
Thoughts are disconnected by distractions, enthusiasm
seems to be running low. Itchy eyes simply cannot focus.

Existing during the rest between notes. Sleeping away
the verses, I will end up out of context within a year or two.
Determination is meant for those with a map who had
goals scribbled across it to begin with. I seem to be lost.

Destinations and tracks erased themselves with help of
one swift strike from a virus carrying an illness without a cure.
The oblivion spreading like wildfire turns decisions to ash
before they ever leave my head. Perhaps I had a predisposition.

The dream to doze out of reach from worries and stress
is constantly snatched away and replaced with the harsh truth.
Reality stings like a sunburn when it is fused into my skin
and imagination is the escape, but it leaves me astray in my mind.
So much needs to be perfect yet the pressure leaves nothing done.

















Not sure about the title So opinions on that thanks.
Other than that, just the usual response and feedback
As you probably have guessed this (writing poetry)
is what I'm doing instead of my homework xD

Motivation cramps inside the fingertips and footsteps
create a pattern of wrong turns across the wooden floor.
Thoughts are disconnected by distractions, enthusiasm
seems to be running low. Itchy eyes simply cannot focus.

and
The dream to doze out of reach from worries and stress
is constantly snatched away and replaced with the harsh truth.
Reality stings like a sunburn when it is fused into my skin
and imagination is the escape, but it leaves me astray in my mind.
So much needs to be perfect yet the pressure leaves nothing done.

Loved those two stanzas. Especially the last line on the latter. But, the imagery on the first one I put up is awesome. Your writing is great, as usual.

Like Misanthropist said, great imagery.

I think this is your best one in a while. I love it.

Thanks you guys, it truly means a lot to know that

I love it and it made me laugh. So many truths in five stanzas...

lyrical_gaah52:

I love it and it made me laugh. So many truths in five stanzas...

1# (might wanna read it more carefully )

Thanks. I’m just wondering though, why did it make you laugh

'Determination are...' Should be 'Determination is...' 'While nervous quotations flickers through a
confusion cluttered mind'. That gorgeous, but on it's own it's just a sentence fragment and doesn't make sense.

Just needed to point those little things out. Otherwise, it's awesome beyond words. Especially
'Existing during the rest between notes. Sleeping away
the verses, I will end up out of context within a year or two.
Determination are meant for those with a map who had
goals scribbled across it to begin with. I seem to be lost.'

Thank you, dear

I fixed the ”are”. I don get what you’re trying to say about that sentence though.
That it doesn’t fit/is out of context and therefore doesn’t make sense or that I shouldn’t have split it up like that?

Again, thanks, your approval makes me --->

Twigg Violence.:

I really like it.

Thanks, but what did you like about it?


1# Follow it please and thank you

I loved it.

Especially this line:
Determination is meant for those with a map who had
goals scribbled across it to begin with. I seem to be lost.

Great imagery in the entire poem, and the wording was excellent.
Loved it. :]

Sentence fragment - it's an incomplete sentence, and it's not proper grammar. I'm not an expert on grammar... but all I mean is that it's just a statement that doesn't lead anywhere. Yeah, it would work if you didn't split it up, but you could also just remove 'while' and it'd sound better.

Oh, I see. Well, I know it’s a fragment but a so called complete sentence isn’t always necessary. Anyway, it is just the “while” that makes it incomplete. If I replaced the full stop with a comma or removed “while” the sentence would be complete. But I get what you’re saying so I’ll erase “while”. It actually does sound better without it. Thanks