Left Alone Out in the Cold

Left Alone Out in the Cold

I wear my name as a pseudonym
Stitched onto this borrowed skin
That I got from a second hand store.

A humble painted mask upon
Screaming features so distorted
By the violence in my silent scream.

A barrier of cobweb keeps me absent
From the world.
This net it cannot contain me
There is no chance it will succeed.

But still,
Still I tangle and I struggle
Trapped in threads of delusion,
Which I can swear was just
My own imagination.
Oh, how wrong,
How wrong can I not be?

Circles and rings create
An artwork of no entrance.
One cascade of pretty colors
That I just can’t seem to get past.
What lies beyond?
What key takes me there?

The taste of frost is bitter
Where it rests behind cold lips
And only smoke rises
From my mouth these days
Painting icy flowers
That spread across my eyes.

My vision is distorted by the winter
That this defeated mind has created
Out of small synapses meant for paranoia.

Snow falls silently upon my heart
And my thoughts are getting dizzy,
I think it is time for my soul to hibernate.


The artic climate out here might
Put out my beings very last light.
I’ll sleep under sheets of isolation
While waiting for some kind of salvation.
Please have some mercy, let me in!
Before all that’s left are bones in a bag of skin.







At last, one more poem by me! So, feedback thanks

Awesome. I loved it. Just a few little suggestions.

'This net it can’t contain me'. I think it would've sounded better as 'cannot contain me'. I feel it would've flowed a little better.

'Painting icy flowers
That spreads across my eyes'. Grammar time! 'Spreads' needs to be changed to 'spread'.

And I noticed that the first two lines rhymed with one another... I was thinking, if you wrote all the three line stanzas in the same way, it would give an awesome structure. But, that would be quite a task because it would be changing the wording very significantly, and it's gorgeous already.

But I really think that
'I wear my name as a pseudonym
Stitched onto this borrowed skin
That I got from a second hand store'
have to be my favourite lines overall, they're beautiful.

Thank you

I changed that, thanks for the suggestion and correction.

I don’t think I’ll try to do the rhyming you suggested though. It would be a major task. Perhaps I’ll do it later, but just maybe.

*bows* Thanks. Yeah, I’m quite fond of them too. But I was going crazy over how on earth to keep writing after those first three lines. I was afraid that the standard of the poem would decline steadily, but I think I pulled it off ^_^

I mean, I think I might even trying playing with interesting rhyming structures. If you used it you'd be effectively re-drafting it though, but it was just a quick observation, because it's already beautiful.