radioactive
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 | December 20th, 2006 at 03:14am I wrote this for my uncle.
Jason Michael Wright. (june 23,1982-august 24,2006)
Father, Friend, Uncle, Superman.
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[[Dedication]]
I used to think superman was invincible,
I was proven wrong today.
Why you left us,
We will never know,
But after you left,
Everyone started to show, their true colors.
We’re all drifting apart,
Starting to hate each other,
No one can hold their head up high,
and say it will be alright.
Guardian angel where have you gone?
Guardian angel what have you done?
Guardian angel why did you leave?
We all need you more now that you’re gone.
Suicide is not a thing to play around with,
Not a thing to joke about,
Not an answer to your questions,
And should never be a thought inside your head.
If I could bring you back,
Without changing anything,
So its like you never left,
I would.
So much quicker than a breath is taken.
Guardian angel where have you gone?
Guardian angel what have you done?
Guardian angel why did you leave?
We all need you more now that you’re gone.
These tears fall from our hearts,
Trying to bring back our friend.
This anger and depression falls from my eyes,
Trying to remember the good times.
My memory has fallen apart.
You where our rock,
Our glue that held us together,
And now like glass we break.
Guardian angel what have you done?
We all need you more now that you’re gone.
You never know how much your going to miss a person until after they’ve left you,
Forever in our hearts you are never forgotten.
Those who had known you are blessed.
Rest In Peace.
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I know it doesnt flow that well but its good right? |
tomamazon
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 | December 20th, 2006 at 02:00pm radioactive:I wrote this for my uncle.
Jason Michael Wright. (june 23,1982-august 24,2006)
Father, Friend, Uncle, Superman.
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[[Dedication]]
I used to think superman was invincible,
I was proven wrong today.
Oh my.
This part made me go 'oh'
I'm really sorry about your loss.
The poem is amazing- the one fault is the flow, but you already mentioned that.
Well done! |
radioactive
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| December 21st, 2006 at 03:08pm im trying really hard to get it to sound right though lol |
Emily-Cool
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Posts: 6657 | December 21st, 2006 at 05:15pm Im sorry for your loss. 
And the words you use are very good.
I actually like it :] |
The Doctor
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| December 22nd, 2006 at 11:24am I think that you could improve on your flow, stop repeating so much; this can hinder a poem and your punctuation was really...meh.
 Keep it up. |
*they_call_me Ri*
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Posts: 177 | December 22nd, 2006 at 03:27pm 'So much quicker than a breath is taken.'
fav line. im sorry for your loss. and i thought it was very nice. the flow thing..just keep workin on that. =] |
love.
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Posts: 2844 | December 23rd, 2006 at 09:32pm amazing.
im sorry for your loss also.
this is really great.
i love it! |
