NeoSteph
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  | January 2nd, 2007 at 08:08pm Escape is more than a six letter word
Closely tied with freedom
It's a chance of relief.
A break from oppressed reality
Through the voyage of maturity
We cling to those who can offer support
Although it can come from the unluckiest sources
An oasis in the middle of a desert
A chance to break free from reality
Live without the obligations of society
To be the person you feel you are
Rather than what people perceive you to be
The up and downs of life are challenging
People along the way forge friendships
And break promises
But hope springs eternal
Those we meet will judge -
Taunt and throw stones
Divided by hate
Still, strength of character guides us
Seeking love is an empty journey
In living for love
We make a break for eternity
So feel blessed you have found something so lovely.
In Life.
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comments appreciated. |
Misanthropist
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Posts: 23279 | January 2nd, 2007 at 08:23pm Escape is more than a six letter world
Closely tied with freedom
It's a chance of relief.
A break from oppressed reality
I really liked that part, and I thought it was ended rather nice as well. Overall it was very good and I liked it. |
paper shoes
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Posts: 34269 | January 2nd, 2007 at 08:38pm NeoSteph:Escape is more than a six letter world Was that done on purpose?
Anyway, good poem, it flows well and doesn't seem forced. |
NeoSteph
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| January 2nd, 2007 at 10:25pm Ieva Gets Along.:NeoSteph:Escape is more than a six letter world Was that done on purpose?
Anyway, good poem, it flows well and doesn't seem forced.
 no that was a silly typo, sorry.
thank you and thank you too other person XD. |
