Ebony Through The Seasons

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Peter Petrelli
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January 6th, 2007 at 09:47am
He’s always adored the way her crimson coated fingertips
caress her shallow ribs when under extremes of pressure.
Claustrophobic anxiety sears through her pale flesh,
each and every time she flows through the hidden passages

of London; deep below the pulsing heart of glowing Camden.
Nothing speaks to her more than his delicate, poets’ soul,
fused together with thread like spiders’ webs and shattered
sentiments of the crypt. His emerald eyes; bright as July,

are captured in frames of liquid liner as black as December.
Angels aren’t always creatures of the skies, and saviours
aren’t always dressed in shining armour. The softest love
stories exude not the clichéd affections of April flowers,

but flourish from frail acorns embedded in the tarnished
asphalt. Silken kisses shared beneath the crystal stars whilst
hiding behind the oaks of Marble Arch. Every autumn, their
leaves fade to the ground, and bleed their sweet nothings onto

the curb – purity told in contemporary faerietales crafted in
lace and leather. Chemical colour separates them like ebony
and ivory, but magical attraction holds them in cataclysmic
equilibrium; soothed only by the touch of skin to skin.
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January 6th, 2007 at 10:02am
OH wow. WOW. That was really beautiful. I love "His emerald eyes; bright as July,

are captured in frames of liquid liner as black as December. "

mostly cuz it made me think of Billie. xD

Its beautiful, though. You have the best metaphors and descriptions.
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January 6th, 2007 at 10:03am
bwahahaha! I showed my friend this just before I wrote my comment and she just emailed me back with this

"Wow. Is this person in like, an interracial relationship or something?"

lmfao
The Doctor.
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January 6th, 2007 at 10:19am
wow.
this is beautiful.
i love the way you phrase things,
Peter Petrelli
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January 6th, 2007 at 03:37pm
lyrical_gaah52:
bwahahaha! I showed my friend this just before I wrote my comment and she just emailed me back with this

"Wow. Is this person in like, an interracial relationship or something?"

lmfao


Noooo... Confused And about Billie; I got the idea after watching a pretty goth boy on a quiz show the other week. Laughing

Thank you everyone. Very Happy
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January 6th, 2007 at 03:46pm
Cheese

So beautiful. Each line elegantly dripping with metephorical and celestial wonder.

Awesome Poet Yuh Huh:

lace and leather. Chemical colour separates them like ebony
and ivory, but magical attraction holds them in cataclysmic
equilibrium; soothed only by the touch of skin to skin.


This bit made me feel guilty and giggle because that's what I'm learning in Chemisty...equillibrium.
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Mibba
January 6th, 2007 at 08:32pm
Holy a;lskjdfksjdf. Don

Surriously, the alliteration. And omg omg omg this piece of assonance:

fused together with thread like spiders’ webs and shattered

Those two words are like godly in the place you have them. Cheese

And beautiful as always.
tehe
Peter Petrelli
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January 7th, 2007 at 05:58am
Embarassed Thank you so much.
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January 7th, 2007 at 01:50pm
I adore this poem!
It's just so... so beautiful. It flows amazingly, your word choice is excellent, the metaphors and imagery are great.
I agree with what everyone has said.
:]

And I love this part:
Nothing speaks to her more than his delicate, poets’ soul,
fused together with thread like spiders’ webs and shattered
sentiments of the crypt. His emerald eyes; bright as July,

are captured in frames of liquid liner as black as December.
Angels aren’t always creatures of the skies, and saviours
aren’t always dressed in shining armour. The softest love
miau
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January 9th, 2007 at 01:28pm
I loved it. Most time big words like 'claustrophobic' are used, they sound weird but here it fitted in perfetly. Wow.
I especially loved

Nothing speaks to her more than his delicate, poets’ soul,
fused together with thread like spiders’ webs and shattered
sentiments of the crypt.


and

Angels aren’t always creatures of the skies, and saviours
aren’t always dressed in shining armour.


Amazing work.
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January 9th, 2007 at 01:36pm
Holy shit.

Absolutely flawless.
I can't think of one inperfection in that.
I read it about five times + still I couldn't place my critical eye on any piece of that.
Everything just fitted so well; it was like a really beautiful jigsaw.

Imagery was wonderful.
How well you use imagery was shown in this here:

'The softest love
stories exude not the clichéd affections of April flowers,
but flourish from frail acorns embedded in the tarnished
asphalt. Silken kisses shared beneath the crystal stars whilst
hiding behind the oaks of Marble Arch. Every autumn, their
leaves fade to the ground, and bleed their sweet nothings onto
the curb – purity told in contemporary faerietales crafted in
lace and leather.'

+ here:

'His emerald eyes; bright as July,
are captured in frames of liquid liner as black as December. '

These two snippets were utterly superb.
The words you chose to paint a picture were simply amazing, they really captured the moment.
Pure talent.
Peter Petrelli
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January 9th, 2007 at 03:11pm
Thank you everyone. Desperately appriciated.
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January 12th, 2007 at 03:14am
amazing. wonderful as always. me woves your powetwy Razz
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January 12th, 2007 at 03:29am
WOW!!! I wish I could write like that. I love it really I do. And this part:

"His emerald eyes; bright as July, are captured in frames of liquid liner as black as December.
Angels aren’t always creatures of the skies, and saviours
aren’t always dressed in shining armour."

I love the way you use colours. I wubs it! Yay!
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January 12th, 2007 at 07:58am
He’s always adored the way her crimson coated fingertips
caress her shallow ribs when under extremes of pressure.
Claustrophobic anxiety sears through her pale flesh,
each and every time she flows through the hidden passages

of London; deep below the pulsing heart of glowing Camden.


I really liked the whole think, but you opened the whole poem quite well.
Peter Petrelli
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January 12th, 2007 at 11:55am
People are still commenting on this? Thank you guys. Very Happy
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